THE DISTRESS OF ANNAPURNA

THE DISTRESS OF ANNAPURNA

There's a land just below the paradise, Of intricate traits ; it's sketch is imprecise. A lady seated there in a state, tranquil, Looks exquisite, and  smiles at her will. The goddess of the grain--Annapurna, is her name, To apportion the grain, seems to be her aim. She carries a bowl in one of her hands, And with a ladle in the other, she traverses other lands. But today, somewhat, melancholy she seems, Upon her distress, she sadly deems. "The ladle doesn't pour into the mouths of who need, The bowl is emptied by the tyrants who lead", thinks she, "So much into nature's lap I lay, But all they snatch, in a heinous way. To favor themselves, they have rules unfair,' Which stifle true needs, without any care". The nature she knows, produces all pure, But what becomes of it, she isn't sure. "In greed, the grain, they adulterate, Without compunction to earn great" realizes she,"Oh Its so ailing to see, This distress, with none to consider my plea. The grain which sustains life each day, Is now also responsible for taking it away." Empty handed, then , she wanders in  a street, Where the affluent enjoy, and the poor ones weep. For this oppression , who is to blame? Who's responsible for these deeds of shame? Somewhere, so many choices, difficult to make, Somewhere, there is agony, of how to take. What is to be put into the hungry child's hand? The emptied the bowls in all the lands!

Reviews

[Prabha Salimath]

But today, somewhat, melancholy
she seems,
Upon her distress, she sadly deems.
"The ladle doesn't pour into the
mouths of who need,
The bowl is emptied by the tyrants
who lead",

it's just happening right now good concept. pretty beautifully penned...

[Serena]

I don't know what to say for this. It's a very powerful piece I feel. I love the rhyme in it, and the way it feels like the goddess is actually talking.

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Hmm,thanks for this review Dark :-). But may I ask,why r u 'dark' poet?

[Serena]

I only write poems when im angry or sad

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Hmm..somewhat this is the case with me,but I am emotions-directed in general. I write when emotions take me into them very deep (anger, sadness and even hapiness for that matter). Writing does let our emotions flow :-)

[Serena]

:) yeah. I like the darker emotions though

[Dayran]

Absolutely fantastic! ... great lines ... nice flow ... and the feel of regret mixed with never ending hope. Well done Gurdeep.

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thanks for thy review Dayran :-)

[Inda]

This is fantastic! I get the feeling of a godess seeing the misfortunes man has created for himself and how it pertains to the missuse of resources. A great portrait of man's continuing march away from nature and how it affects more than we think. Good stuff!

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Thnks for ur king review Inda :-)

[Laminators Dubai]

The point of view is so human that you can't ask for more and I'm amazed to see that how well written it is.

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Hmm...Thanks. By the way how did you find the picture? :P

[Laminators Dubai]

That's relevant and like cultural Indian painting styles. that tree isn't green anymore and the the river doesn't seem so healthy....like you said "So much into nature's lap I lay,
But all they snatch, in a heinous way''

[Gurdeep...The Lost]

Hmm..I had just randomly drawn it and felt lazy to fill in colours, or make leaves for the tree etc. But, you have justified their absence so nicely :-) Thank you.
PS: I could not find a relevant of picture of Annapurna on net, so thought I'll jsut draw soemthing :P hha.

[Laminators Dubai]

That's actually very good idea. nice try