Lies of the Modern Day

Lies of the Modern Day

A Poem by Celestial Witch Child

Shallow love
Smiling impostors
Festering frustration
Screams hidden under
white knit cotton
This is the world
in which we live
Pretenses pouncing
from every corner
Fraudulent thoughts
defining our souls

© 2012 Celestial Witch Child


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The locomotive punchiness of this poem is really rewarding to the reader and is very effective in its communication of comment. It reads like a mantra, and the style and language is expressed with an angry strength which would be hard for even the most dismissive to ignore. The brevity of the piece adds to the effect, in that although there is an element of being left wanting more, the rhythm and sentiment of the words set a chain reaction in motion which carries on even after the reader has finished...
Very good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I've felt that way too many times to count so I completely understand

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How the world is today, I agree completely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The locomotive punchiness of this poem is really rewarding to the reader and is very effective in its communication of comment. It reads like a mantra, and the style and language is expressed with an angry strength which would be hard for even the most dismissive to ignore. The brevity of the piece adds to the effect, in that although there is an element of being left wanting more, the rhythm and sentiment of the words set a chain reaction in motion which carries on even after the reader has finished...
Very good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Pretenses pouncing" just rolls right off the tongue. Nice use of alliteration. The world is very flat sometimes, unlike this 3D poem of yours. Nice.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the style of this piece! It's very candid, and I like the social commentary.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very deep! I enjoy your style of writing here! The truthfulness is amazing! I love it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very well written. Amazing, speaks the truth for everybody. Love it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You speak for us all,
creativity may be ostracised in this world
because we will not surrender to superficiality...
:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is a shallow world, that is for sure. That is why it is up to us individually to not be. Nice work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is really excellent, I write alot of stuff myself about the same topic. Great poem and great job! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 28, 2012
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