Growing Time

We sneaked past Father Time, now to create chaos

Come with me

We must be quiet

As we sneak

Past Father Time

Catch him while he’s sleeping

Under the great oak

And slip into his field

Plots are marked out

For everyone and everything

Either flourishing or withering

As time ticks on

I find our plot

Amongst the others

‘Tis a dying square

Of twisted metal

Seeming to resemble

Persistence of Memory

The tree’s hands move slowly

Each turn of the clock’s gears

Seeming a step closer

To death

I cry out in anguish

Despairing the plot

Of our dying relationship

Ticking its last

Quick! Before it’s too late

I must save our relationship

Before its time passes on

Dig a hole

Plant a watch

The beginning of time

Pray it takes root

And water it well

Oil and water combining

The dirt crumbles

As up sprouts a tree

Glistening in the sunlight

As it twists upward

Its branches are hands

Counting off seconds

As they tick by on its trunk

A pendulum swaying within

Success! All hope isn’t lost!

With a grin and shaking hands

I repeat this process

Constantly planting trees

Adding time to our plot

And prolonging our relationship

To eternity

Reviews

[Thea Fuentebella]

nice write. I loved it!
thanks for sharing :)
100/100

[Julie Beth]

amazing this was great good job :)

[Shelby]

A very fresh and interesting way to look at a losing relationship restored. Very vivid and lovely, the idea of time running out, so you plant a watch and care for it, creating more time. You write in a way I so rarely see, and I enjoy that because it's new and fresh in the reading. I would never use the word hackneyed to describe your writing. The idea of the relationship being a plot, with the double meaning of story and place to plant, was particularly stunning and eloquent. I love your poetry. Thank you for sharing it with me.

[sarah]

This is so great! you are so talented

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Great read..!!!!

[trainwreck]

I really like this. Its had a great rythym.

[MandaBear]

I feel like this poem lol very good!! its very interesting. gives alot of emotion in it.
love reading your stuff :)

[akapr17other]

I love this poem! It's such a cool idea that's expressed in such an interesting way. You really got me thinking. Thanks for sharing this great write!

Love & Roses,
Graci

[♥Chloe-The-Zombi..]

WOW!!!! this is really good. it has a lot of description. i really really like it!! 99/100