A human's version of God

Deep and fascinating

the thought of God

let's create a figure

that doesn't fit our imagination

It that seems to listen

all our prayers

and put a faith in heart

but it will remain hidden

till the end of us

It which is an idea

of progress and creativity

that will be worshiped

in temple and church

in the form of statue

The idea that will get immersed

in the deep shell of subconscious mind

and wars will be fought

or peace will be asked

'in the name of God'

This is how social structure will take form

of permanence 

Let's create this figure then

'Omnipresent yet one who can't be seen

has superpowers but with conditions

...conditions that no one can understand

has righteousness and honesty at the core

that who comes to earth

to right the wrongs of men

that who loves good beings

and punishes bad ones

that who rewards in heaven

and punishes in the hell...

heaven and hell..

ideas that will shape the karmas of beings

going forward.'

Let's publish it

Let's speak it

Let's redo it

and let it shape the future of society

for independence of countries is possible and worthy

but independence of mind is not...

Reviews

[Anushka joshi]

I like your imagination and the creative side of your mind , nice penning !!! keep it up
and gaurav please go through some of my poems that match your thoughts and let me know in the review section that which one matches your imagination I AM SURE YOU WILL FIND NEW IDEAS THERE !!!

[Gaurav]

Thank you Anushka..yes sure..would love to :)

[barleygirl]

I like the creativity you show in painting your idea of God, but I disagree. Some people find it motivating to think of heaven & hell, reward & punishment, as a reason to try to be a better person. But I believe in NOT putting God on some far-away & untouchable pedestal. I see God as an everyday presence in my life just like a friend, hearing my thoughts like prayers & putting ideas in my head as I go along, helping me to find my way & be a better person. Your "Word Monument to God" makes him feel inaccessible, like a judge sitting on high. I know most people think of God that way & your poem is creative to make this into a "let's imagine God" exercise. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Gaurav]

Thank you for your words..yes God can be everywhere, in every thing, in atom.....I am just making sure that I realize it...once i realize it, like you do, i will be free :)

[Ruth]

Sad thing about faith really...I always believe such things are within the self, the divine are in us and are us both at once....there is beauty in faith (whatver spiritual path one takes) but the mainstream version of such often becomes something completely different to the true way, sadly. Poignant piece...

[Gaurav]

thank you Ruth

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Yeah yeah....!!!I agree with all of this. I love God.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we seem to not be able to break the chains in our mind...and sometimes it keeps us all from moving forward...of making ourselves better...
we just go forward without purpose.
It is said that God made man in His image...perhaps we have decided to make God in our image.
and as Joan Osborne sang..."what if God was one of us?"
perhaps he walks among us now and we just don't recognize him...or care to.
j.