Extremely elegant write, portraying the inevitable final call with grace and of course, that final sigh. I wonder if I'll be so calm when the grim one knocks. Maybe he tweets these days instead.
Superbly captured piece.
You write about subjects some wouldn't touch with a ten-foot pole, but you do it ever so well. I have really enjoyed what i have read so far. Write on! :)
Like this poem a lot- at first I didn't pick up that it was death calling- expected that he was there to assault you or kidnap you- so I loved the surprise that it was death coming to call. A very powerful picture of your image of death, and the resignation and sadness in having no choice but to go with him. Going back to re-read it, I also liked the feeling "I have no time for this" - the impatience and irritation you voice, which seems just like what some of us would feel, "not you, not now! I have no time for this- still have so much to do!"
Lol, I think any kidnapper might think twice as I'm a hairy arsed builder( 'scuse my French ) and if.. read moreLol, I think any kidnapper might think twice as I'm a hairy arsed builder( 'scuse my French ) and if the boys on site knew this was a pastime of mine I would get ribbed mercilessly. Thank you, glad you enjoyed
Great rhyming with this one, delivering the message of death with chilling finess - my only thought is that the word "was" in the final line isn't really necessary as I feel it reads a bit more fluently without it and still delivers the message :)
Oh, I like the first few stanzas, after the end is revealed. I know there is a very serious message here and it's well communicated. But the thought of dismissing death, demanding he go, so entertaining...
Devoted family man and lover of life.
Simply written, easily understood "stuff" for those without code breaking skills. You will NEVER need Google to understand me:)
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