INVISIBLE - Prologue

Do you know how it feels to want to be invisible?

The bright pink roses dance with the cool breeze of the late afternoon. And the clear waters of the pond beside ripple at each drop of tear that flows through my eyes.

I am alone, in the Halcyon Circle, the sanctuary-physique area of our Academy that marks the zone of seclusion.

There they go again. No, they did it again, the bullies. I wonder what had driven them to hate me this much. Is it my attitude, or is it how I look? I wonder why.

I stare at the reflection on the pond. Who would even like a lonely face with swollen red eyes covered by big weird glasses, and a set of teeth embedded with ugly silver braces? Yes, I am a nerd. But I wonder why it is quite a big deal to be slightly different from other people when the cause is your uneven vision and dental defect fixed by braces yet make speech sound horrible. I admit I have dark skin, but does color defy one's state of being?

I am not intelligent, I'm just a good reader, and that makes me more unique, negatively... because unlike other nerds with lots of knowledge compressed in their brains, I have only half of those, or maybe it hadn't even gone to that level.

I just do satisfactorily with my academics. Well, I think what's important is being literate, numerate, and wise.

But I guess that's not enough. Sometimes, I just wish I was invisible...

I am Mary Garnette Shaw. I am sixteen. I am dealing hard with the second semester of Chemical Engineering (Bachelor's Degree) Year One, in Preston Academy.

This is my struggle to be invisible - to my school, to my family, to my love...

Reviews

[dw817]

My Dad once told me that he is a Renaissance Man. I asked him what that was. He said it is someone who knows a little bit about everything.

I commented saying, I suppose that is better than someone who knows everything about nothing.

He smirked. :) And yes, I understand the desire to be invisible - so to the point that in my dreams I can touch the 3rd finger on my right hand and vanish from sight.

You might be interested in watching a movie about a struggling nerd who learns the power of telekinesis. It's called, "Zapped !" and you can find more information about it HERE,
http://bit.ly/1N0qE2I

If you model your story along the same line, where he uses his power of invisibility to not only get even with bullies but to catch schoolgirls in their intimates, likely you will have quite a bit of a story to write and an even greater following of readers, me included. :)

[Prime]

Thank you dw817 ^_^ Actually I lost my laptop which contained the first few chapters of this story. Due to academic demands I even forgot about how this would go chapter by chapter. But when I find enough time I will create another outline, hopefully I might remember my original plot.

I originally planned to make this story's theme supernatural and begin this with bullying, for a change with my usual genre. :D.

[Prime]

And thank you for sharing about your dad. ^_^

[dw817]

UBetcha. In my own story I have two teens who do gain supernatural ability from a mysterious USB plugin, and yes - they do go after bullies - but a secret organization who experiments on gifted children is after them as well.

If you haven't seen it, you might watch the movie, "Escape To Witch Mountain" which is a perfect example of this.

[Prime]

Is that related to Race to Witch Mountain? haha I'll watch that later. I've been so busy since the start of college but I'm gonna spend some time for so. And I'm gonna read that story of yours ^_^ please send me the link through message so I may read it later. ^_^

[Prime]

Hey, let me ask you a favor anyway ^_^ can you please read the prologue of my new story, COSMIC, under my profile? Thanks a lot.
It's plot has been on my mind since I started college and I'm always making revisions (in my drafts) I really want to be as precise as possible, scientifically (can't see much now but there'll be more 'science' things in the following chapters.)

[dw817]

I'm checking it out now. As for realism in your stories, yes, I think this is important.

read moreI'm checking it out now. As for realism in your stories, yes, I think this is important.

For instance, when I have teleportation occur in the 2nd novel, I go in great lengths and detail about just HOW it is accomplished, using the most advanced descriptions and probable science I can.

It doesn't -JUST- happen. Anyone can write that. It takes dedication and heart to write out magical things occurring as hard science. Give it some thought. :)

[dw817]

Augh, that stupid read-more thing didn't get the rest. Basically, YES realism is important. Anyone can write when something magical happens, but it takes heart and skill to write it as an understandable and scientific thing, fully explained with detail and realism.

Readers want this. If something magical does happen, HOW did it ? Place the reader in your book - that's the method.

[Prime]

Thanks again dw817 Haha. Of course, there is a need for us storytellers to explain and describe whatever strange phenomena is happening in our story and we don't want to confuse our readers or give them the wrong idea. ^_^