Breaking Heaven

Breaking Heaven

A Poem by Jason Ellis

Eternal pillars crumble before my eyes;

Boundless walls, decimated by my lies.

I take in a wisp of cloud as it delicately flies,

Amidst the pieces of God’s fallen fortress,

Plummeting from the skies.

© 2020 Jason Ellis


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Beautiful. I like this sentiment of this piece a lot.
...Misty

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Posted 4 Years Ago


This is really beautiful, Jason. Short, but really full of emotion...I hope you write some more here soon. :)

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Posted 4 Years Ago


Sounds interesting! It`s short but well expressed via few poetic words. I liked this write!

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Posted 6 Years Ago


Much impact with these five lines. beautiful poem and this line "I take a wisp of a cloud as it delicately flies" is soo lovely.

Chloe

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Really liked this poem. Each line had purpose and feeling behind it. No word was used without reason. Beautiful flow and line to it.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this. For such a short poem, it has a lot of thought behind it. Each line is very strong and it has a very fluid rhythm. Nice work. I like the picture you picked for it as well.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short but so beautiful its so smooth and totally packed with powerful lines. Imagery stood within at its peak. Excellent one keep it up.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow, this is amazing.... i wish i could write lyrical poems as amazing as this! this is truly magnificent in the imagery, its like you create a canvas out of a mind. keep up the good work :)

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this reads like a song lyric.. i love the pacing and the flow of the words when you say them aloud.

wonderfully done!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this, its very to the point, not a lot of description but enough to give the outline.

Very, very good descriptions.


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Jason Ellis
Jason Ellis

Pace, FL



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