Would it be?

Would it be?

A Poem by GwenLark
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Thoughts of a future

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What if my body just gave in?

Would it be such a surprise?

Such a shock?


Would imposters costumed as friends

Mourn?

Would characters shrouded in black

Tell heavily amended versions of

My truth?


When would that be?


Would it be after many ‘happy’ years of ‘belonging’

With glazed over eyes?

Would it be after travelling a world full of despair and

Cruelty?

Would it be after producing an heir

To this kingdom of

Imagined joy?


Would it be alone?


Would it be after a lifetime of struggle,

A lifetime of pain

A lifetime of heartache and disappointment?


Would it be tomorrow?


Before the golden light of a cold and

Unforgiving sun peered over the distant

Tree tops?

Before I even opened my eyes?


I pray it is.

© 2018 GwenLark


Author's Note

GwenLark
Please ignore cadence and spacing.
New to poetry

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So many questions in the poem. So many answers. The "Would it be?'. A lasting question to be answer by time and life. Thank you Gwen for sharing the amazing poetry. I like the poetry. That make the reader think and ponder.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


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GwenLark

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much!
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

You are welcome Gwen.



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damn. that was raw and honest and a bit heart wrenching. I hope that you don't only see the darkness you've portrayed in this piece. may you see brighter days.

-J-

Posted 1 Year Ago


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GwenLark

1 Year Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read :)
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Rye
This is so very true, I really like this write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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GwenLark

2 Years Ago

Thanks so much
I've never been one to ponder life & death so it surprises me to see how much thought many writers give to these weighty matters. Sometimes, when conveying a message thru questioning, the writer reveals what he/she really thinks thru leading questions. What I love about your poem is that you do not use leading questions. It's truly a mystery what you might be thinking as you pose these questions. This feels like a truly FREE little spiel of wondering about life & death in an open-ended way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Years Ago


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GwenLark

2 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed it
What if's can be frustrating; we need to live for the what is and the moment! Great thought provoking write - really makes you re-read the questions you pose - interesting piece! … :-)

Posted 2 Years Ago


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GwenLark

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
"An heir to this kingdom of imagined joy" your words cut deep, in the entire poem but this line I found to be genius and so original it can be quoted. I have read only one other piece of your work so far but i'm starting to believe I understand what drives your poetry and I relate to it. Your poem makes me think and question a lot of things, it is so introspective and challenging. I loved how you wove in some amazing imagery and had a powerful closer. Great write

Posted 2 Years Ago


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GwenLark

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much. That means a lot
Amazing insightful poem. That really makes you think, deep and hard. Excellent poem Gwen.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

GwenLark

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much
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Gee
Who knows hat tomorrow will bring. 27 years ago I went on holiday to Tenerife and met the most amazing Ayrshire lass who then moved South, agreed to be my wife and has given me the most beautiful, loving daughter any man could wish to share his life with.....

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pondering on the future. Many questions asked, but none answered. A good read.

Chris

Posted 3 Years Ago


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GwenLark

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for taking the time to read
Chris

3 Years Ago

You are welcome GwenLark
Powerful poem, interesting read! Well done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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GwenLark

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much xx
This is beautiful and meaningful. As for being new to poetry don't worry so much about getting it "technically" right because I've been writing poetry for years not bothering to make sure the syllables match and that it's a proper rhyming structure and enough people like it like that so it doesn't really bother me. Writing is art and technicalities only matter so much in art. Imagine a painter who holds the brush differently being scrutinized for it when their painting is amazing. I say it doesn't really matter how you made it, it just matters that it's been made with love and effort.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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GwenLark

3 Years Ago

That is so true. Thanks so much!
Ariana Omnomnom

3 Years Ago

You're welcome ❤️ just write the way you want to write, don't worry about it being good unless y.. read more

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