stories of the broken

Stories from my life.

I’m going mad 

Insane

It truly is glad

That I am my bane

In armor I am clad

I must erase the stain

I am sad

And for this I must strain

But what can be had?

My own refrain?

Though I may be bad

Hear my words, My campaign

And to this I must add

Though I have lost my way

Lightly I must pad

There is nothing I can gain

No one to lend a helping hand

To relieve the pain

There is nothing I can demand

Though I must stay in my own lane

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Good morning🌤️ Dear ZS🕷

What a pleasure it is to find this stellar poetic piece that so vividly, emotionally, creatively intelligently, and captivatingly speaks to us in a voice that talks the talk and walks the walk of one who's been there and done "all that."
Brilliant, too, your clever use of two alternating monorhymes in twenty lines of deeply heartfelt, expressive feelings to both entertain and amaze our poetic enjoyment and relatedly sad compassion.

I wish I'd known this truly impressive poetic form … I'd have enjoyed writing in it.
Thank you for sharing You, ZS🕷 ⁓ Richard🖌


[only critique I'll offer is a hue darker font and separate into Quatrains for easier reading and mind's-eye appeal, but I love it, nonetheless] : )

[Zombified Spider]

I did it for a DnD campaign and when I copied it it did that... I've tried to fix it several times but it's still not working

[Richard🖌]

I messaged some copy/paste help. : )
What about the rest of my review? LOL!

[Zombified Spider]

Why thank you, kind sir. I do appreciate your review.

[Richard🖌]

Big SMILE!

[Julia.Moore]

A passion for haiku poetry began during world literature studies, inspired by its ability to convey profound ideas in a few syllables. Many of these haikus, capturing life's fleeting beauty, are featured in the book Blue Harlequin. Read the full article to explore the beauty of haiku poetry: https://aoidemagazine.com/what-is-haiku-poetry/

[Zombified Spider]

I'm so sorry, What message are you trying to convey?

[June bug]

This is amazing! I love the poeticness of this write as well.
Lots of direct feelings in this write, so emotional.
Nicely written.

[Zombified Spider]

Thanks so much for the review, I try my best to make my work nice, but in the end, it turns emotional.