In That Closing Hour

In That Closing Hour

A Poem by Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

o' that final act (or breath)
where the permanency of darkness
usurps this weather-beaten stage
in limelight's repose, predictably
teaching life the meekness of a moment

flashing rolodex'd memories
stampede through a shrinking tunnel
doomed nostalgia of better times
fear and anxiety assisting them along
like decent pallbearers do

from oblivion's front porch
an old man, dressed in black
reaches his cold hand out for mine
and this weary spirit obliges him
destiny realized through closed eyes

give me no tears or worried brow
deific peace requires no mortal assistance
yet in my absence, steal away to her
comfort her pangs as I would, tenderly
cover her in love and light

should anyone long for me,
take great care to seek them out
those brilliant extensions of myself
i'll be in the corners of their smiles
living evermore through their laughter & charms

© 2020 Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)


Author's Note

Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)
Thank you for reading. Rest up, Kobe. #8

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The first stanza has too many long words.

Don't try hard to open. Try hard to finish.

Your lead in is too heavy. It f***s up the entire pace.

Open simple, work from that.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

I can see what you mean... I was trying to make the beginning a bit more dramatic then the rest of t.. read more
DDav

1 Year Ago

You're quite the diplomat. Have you ever seen a movie called Michael Clayton? It's not relevant to.. read more
I have to say this is remarkable! Such a stunning weaving of imagery and heartfelt sentiments, the afters so tenderly thought of throughout this, death faced is often death understood I think and who doesn't wish for those left behind that they are comforted and at peace as much as they can be...wonderful poem :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

Thank you... Unfortunately, I have lost many dear to my heart. I no longer see death as a negative, .. read more
In these days of darkness, fear and lockdown, we are confronted with death and life's fragility on a daily basis. We can not help but confront our own mortality, and I for one am feeling less restless now my paperwork is in order and that my loved ones are aware of my wishes. I hope that when my time comes, it comes swiftly, without tearful goodbyes and that my loved ones will remember me with kindness and know that all I did for them was always with my best intentions for their well being. I hope they burn a candle for me on occasions as I have for my dearly loved and departed from time to time. This is a poignant write and I can see that it was written with Kobe in mind. May he RIP. An accomplished piece Travis, most thoughtful.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

You speak of your loved ones so sincerely, I'm sure you will indeed have that candle. So, many forge.. read more
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Death I suppose now is daily news, in the hundreds every day to remind us how fickle life really is.
I think our own death is probably thought about, and if we've done our best in life, then that's the footprint we leave behind.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

These current times are indeed a stark reminder of life's fragility. I wish more of us took greater .. read more
i love this work Travis! wonderful attitude on ones own death .. its brutally honest and yet makes it all OK! ;) these lines:
"fear and anxiety assisting them along
like decent pallbearers do" are incredible to me ... we fail in life to speak of death .. unwanting to face it in ourselves and others whom we love especially .. your poem nails it for me (pun not intended) the turn so positive and uplifting as thoughts remind those grieving to look for the dead in smiles and lives affected by that person in life .. we should never forget the face of our fathers ... in memory the dead are immortal as much as can be on Earth .. so glad i read this ... i would put it in me will to be read to me children when i go .. well done!
E.



Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

You leave humbled, good friend... and have captured the tone and intention of this piece perfectly. .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

its a good thing to talk about death and dying .. no matter age .. it is our natural cycle of life ... read more
A fitting and sad tribute to a star gone soon with an accident that shocked and impacted the millions of fans along with others. Every line is sensitive and emotional to the tone of this calamity. Your tender love is shown, your mighty pen is drawn.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

Thank you for yet again, humbling my pen hand.
Sami Khalil

1 Year Ago

You are welcome sir.
i see what inspired this, but what makes it such a good poem is how universal it is.
just this week i attended a service for a dear friend's husband...gone way too soon at 43..by his own hand..
sometimes the clock strikes that hour for us...we are meant to leave when we leave.
While the carriage can still take us to the next place of residence.
excellent tribute to Kobe....and I was able to relate in another way as well...
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review, good friend. My condolences go to out to you as well as his loved ones. Loss .. read more

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Added on March 12, 2020
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