Inadequate

Inadequate

A Poem by H McG

I know you care,

But not as I do;

I care for you.

 

You are my shelter from the rain,

But your ceilings are too high.

Can’t patch you up

When cracks start to surface.

The pain trickles in.

 

You caught me once

In my heavenly plunge,

But I spy a trail of feathers.

Can’t lift the weight from your shoulders,

That bends your bleeding wings.

 

Every time you pick up my pieces,

While I slip with fumbling fingers

When we break, like we do.

Yet you love me,

But not as I do;

I’m in love with you.

© 2014 H McG


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H McG
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You are my shelter from the rain, love this opening line, tells so much to the reader right off the bat! Nice job!!
When cracks start to surface.
The pain trickles in. Perfectly described. The pain one feels when love is more one sided! Wonderful job!


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much!



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wow inspired piece of work..beautiful and a slam dunk ending...

Posted 8 Years Ago


I enjoyed this.. great job with the metaphors..

Posted 9 Years Ago


H McG

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I love free verse poetry… and you do it so very well…
Yes there is a difference between loving someone and being in love with someone. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much for your comment :) I'm glad you liked my take on the concept
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

9 Years Ago

My pleasure young lady.
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JC
ah the complications of life and love put so well into poetic form. enjoyed reading this, made me remember and think of my past and present.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! And yes it's tough- I think we've all been there.
Interesting choice of descriptors and an aware understanding of the differences in shades of meanings

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much!
You are my shelter from the rain, love this opening line, tells so much to the reader right off the bat! Nice job!!
When cracks start to surface.
The pain trickles in. Perfectly described. The pain one feels when love is more one sided! Wonderful job!


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much!
Wooooowwwwww! The ending is so memorizing. And this "You are my shelter from the rain,
But your ceilings are too high." Just wow. Your words are a delight to the senses. Seriously. Such a good poet!


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the lovely words! I really appreciate it.
beautiful... i find myself in the same situation of unequal love except i'm the one who's distant

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thank you. And that's really interesting- I never thought about what it's like to be the person on t.. read more
Dark Heart of Winter

9 Years Ago

its an interesting conundrum alright... i have reasons to love her less than i used to (or, i think .. read more
It is sad when love is felt differently between two people, isn't it? Nice articulation. The differences between being in love, and loving someone are few but I could probably talk about it endlessly.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Yes I agree that the difference between those two types of love is so important and thank you very m.. read more
Reina Stone

9 Years Ago

You're welcome hun. Write on

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Added on October 25, 2014
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Tags: love, unrequited, unrequited love, inadequacy

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H McG
H McG

London, United Kingdom



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