Dream Catcher

Dream Catcher

A Poem by H McG

I caught a dream between my teeth-

Bit down to taste the meaning on my tongue,

But it dribbled past my lips

And was sucked into the pillow’s lung.

 

I ripped apart the fabric flesh-

Sent feather organs flying through the night

To make some sense of what I’d seen

And came across a liquid light.

 

I squeezed with sleepy fingers

And it seeped into my soul,

Patterned with sinner’s fissures-

Now filled with spectral glow

 

And here I saw what could be seen,

Yet little did I get

From the product of guilty wishes

And a thin veil of regret:

 

I see her in the daytime

And I see her here at night,

But never in the distance

Bathed in blazing light.

© 2014 H McG


Author's Note

H McG
I would love to hear any feedback you have for me down in the comments!

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I love the lighting in this poetry of yours it brings out the joy of what we as poets write for. I made me see a nice background in my mind of plenty of flavors to taste on my tongue and the dream continued and things moved along it lead me to deeper places where color alined.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm so glad you like my work.



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You have some very creative metaphorical references here… outstanding writing. Poetry is open to interpretation and I have to say this could be taken on many levels and that is what good poetry is about.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much! I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

9 Years Ago

You are so very welcome.
I really like this poem. I almost feel like the last stanza is part of another thought -- but perhaps, just a differentiation in font or placement would set it apart.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thank you and also good idea!
The last stanza was a possible standalone but to me it didn't fit the flow of the others. You were going someplace real and personal and the last stanza came across as a wall and shut the thought down tight. - least to me.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

You make some very good points. Thank you for all your feedback.
Chris

9 Years Ago

k... was not talkin down to you...or even talking AT you... hope to hear more of your work.
H McG

9 Years Ago

I know you weren't, don't worry :)
Welllllllll........ the rhythm and flow are good
But not sure exactly where you were going with it.

And then I thought that it indeed did read like a crazy dream.

Trace

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow so beautiful! Your imagery and word usage is just impeccable. Your words take your reader to a different place. Absolutely brilliant. Thank you for sharing this !

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the lighting in this poetry of yours it brings out the joy of what we as poets write for. I made me see a nice background in my mind of plenty of flavors to taste on my tongue and the dream continued and things moved along it lead me to deeper places where color alined.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm so glad you like my work.
I thoroughly enjoyed the poem, inspirational and beautiful at the same time. You're quite the poet keep it up.

Posted 9 Years Ago


H McG

9 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the kind words!
Amazing! It feels like a dream on the verge of lucid. You are an artist for sure!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks so much! I'm glad you like it.
Soundsage090

9 Years Ago

Haha my review may not have been very constructive or helpful but it was honest.
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Tim
You obviously have skills. I take it the "her" you refer to is the dream catcher. I like the bits of alliteration and the syntax in general. I think you did a great job writing this.

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H McG

9 Years Ago

Thanks very much for this comment. And I'm not saying that 'her' isn't the dream catcher, but that I.. read more

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Added on October 25, 2014
Last Updated on October 27, 2014
Tags: dream, dreams, dream catcher, life, death, ghosts

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H McG
H McG

London, United Kingdom



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