Winter Cycle

Murky ponds freeze, rain turns to snow

Tall proud pine trees, dressed in white, stand against the biting cold

Leave-less limbs dance in the gentle breeze

Furry rabbits poke through the snow, basking in the light

The deep snowbanks melt, snow turns to puddles

Bright sun, shining on the forest, brings new life

Author's Note

I'm still trying new things. Any thoughts and suggestions would be appreciated.

Reviews

[matrixmark]

The lne which you used with the rabbit was such a good line and felt like a picture of innocence and innocent and beauty was painted before my eyes - I am a massive lover of animals and just that line in itself had such an impact on me and is going to stick in my head for a while.

Mark.

[Hannah]

I love animals too, which is why I had to include something on the. Thank you for reading.

[matrixmark]

Always a pleaure.

Mark.

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A very visual poem, Hannah.

Lush imagery that enables the reader to visualise this change in season as the cold of winter dies out and the sun brings forth a taste of spring.

Nicely detailed and written. Well Done.

[Hannah]

Thank you, Doodley.

[duff]

This reads like a fairy tale. A soothing flow by a delicate hand. The way you've created the setting is fantastic. Great job!

[Hannah]

Thank you for the flattering review, duff.

[duff]

You're very welcome.

[Kelly Scheppers]

You gave winter a warm embrace, Hannah. It so often gets a bad rap, but the imagery you provide of nature and its idiosyncrasies are lovely!

[Hannah]

Thank you, Kelly. Glad you think so.

[Manu]

A beautiful and sweet write, Hannah :-)
Very nice imagery. I liked how you described this winter cycle..A very refreshing write.This write is fine as the way it is.Keep writing.

[Hannah]

Thank you, Gorthi.

[richieb]

Hannah,
I think your tweaks worked well. Your poem has a smoother flow. I really like the way it now reads. Good job.
Richie b.

[Hannah]

Thanks, Richie. Glad you think so.

[Jacob Clifford]

Very nice sensory detail in this poem. The ending made me wish winter was already at an end. We'll just have to make the best of things until it warms up.

[Hannah]

Sorry I didn't see your review until now. Winter has its good parts, but I'm glad it's almost over.

[Inject Positivity]

This is beautiful Hannah! The imagery you have created here with different scenes of nature I'd wonderful. It makes the reader ponder over the magnificent beauty of nature hat comes even in the midst of cold winter... Sun shining on the forest bringing new life is a thought that I will carry with me from here my frnd... Very good write...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Hannah]

I'm glad you enjoy the poem so much. Thank you.

[richieb]

Hannah,
I understand what you are wanting to say here but I think you contradicted yourself a few times. With winter putting nature into submission the line,"Bright sun, shining on the forest floor, brings new life",is a line to be used with spring approaching. Also the deep snow banks melting and the rain turning to snow is contradicting.
You may have rushed this poem but it has potential and can be worked out. The rest of the poem is fitting and captures the winter season.
Richie b.

[Hannah]

I made a couple tweaks to the poem. That second like with the rain turning to snow was a typo. The poem is supposed to be winter from beginning to end, starting with things freezing and ending with them thawing. I hope the changes make it more obvious. Thank you for your comments.