Life-A Game

Life is like riding a bicycle...in order to keep your balance..you must keep moving!

Roaming around on the roof top
Look around and stop
Raindrops pouring on me
The clouds roaring as I see
Thunderstorm seems to have no end
Seems like even before God it wont bend
Wonder buildings require such a strong base
Relations are build on the same staircase
This weather reminds me of the past
Realize time passes by so fast
Time in days is passing like years
Standing here remembering the memories in silent tears
Forever friends shall we be we aim
But look back and nothing's the same
Here I stand pouring out the tears wetter than the rain
Opening all the wounds,suffering the pain
Perhaps the day I die
May be nobody gets a chanc to say me Goodbye
Friends coat your tears in lies,do whatever it takes to hide
Remember me gud bad but no matter I wont be beside
I'd be carefree too far away
May be you  drop a tear missing me you say
She was my daughter my sister my best friend
But sadly in no moment her life came to an end
I'd be happy away from all the pain
Remember me with the pouring rain
Have strength forget me friends this is the death game
One day or the other we all wil be in a frame!

Reviews

[NoelHC]

Again Anahat, a nice piece of writing, emotions and feeling stated well. Again, I am perturbed by the text language usage. This poem looks and reads too nicely to be marred with the use of d instead of the, n instead of and, n nthns d when and nothing's the is so much more eloquent.

Is there some purpose to doing these abbreviations that I am missing?

[Anahat]

nope thats my mistake...i had initially written the poems with abbreviations and posted them as such...but i got to know that it should not be used...so you wont find them in my next writings..
Thankuu for the appreciation...means alot :)

[Teacup Tempest]

Profound. I read this poem three times and each time culled a different meaning. It is one I will want to revisit over and over to see what new emotion I reveal.

[Anahat]

Wowww...thats absolutely awesome....Thank you for a wonderful review :)

[Girl With A Pen]

"Forever friends shall we be we aim
But look back and nothing's the same"

Beautifully written! Your poem really says something! :)

[Anahat]

thank you so much :)

[Pure Innocence]

I really like your poems but the text type of language really takes away from your poems. What happens for me is I start to read the piece and then become distracted by the use of full words and then I sit there trying to interpret what the words are, instead of what the poem is saying. You can edit your poems on this site and I think it would help your readers a lot if you went through and maybe had some one sit down with you to help find all the areas that need to be fixed. I would even be willing to read through some of your poems and help you fix them up.
That being said I really do love the piece. You have a great talent for taking emotions and thoughts and being able to put them into beautiful words. Well done, I hope this helped :) Keep up the great work!

[Anahat]

yup sure I will correct it now itself...Thanks for the suggestion...
And for the review as well...glad u like it...:)

[Daydreamer]

A usual kind of thought, expressed in an elegant and edgy way. Good work ;)

[Anahat]

thanku so much :)

[Daydreamer]

Welcome Anahat :) you're also welcome to check out my profile :)

[Anahat]

yup sure :)

[Daydreamer]

All right, waiting :)

[Daydreamer]

Alright, waiting :)

[Kopa...]

LOVELY PIECE! AT THIS POINT I HAVE BECOME A FAN OF YOUR TXT MESSAGE STYLED WRITING, U NEVER DISAPPOINT, AGAIN LOVELY PIECE.

[Anahat]

again..thnku so much..for spending your precious time in reading my poems..
Thankxx aton :)

[Saddam]

Beautifully done with your Short spelled speciallity. It like that I am reading a message..... Yes a message...

[Anahat]

hehhe...i am definitely going to avoid it and infact i have from Holding Hands...i have written complete words in it...
Thankxx aton :)

[unsavable_soul]

Nice work,
Great rhyme scheme, Some typos but beyond that this piece is good.