Olden Love

 I shall plan not to avenge his loner’s heart which shone so benign on the sea,

‘Tis a bloody tyrant forever marked on the hands of the blameworthy. 

 Prithee the rushing of the wind will blow its despairing course, 

So God may tip the boat into gentle lullabies of remorse.

Alas, a youthful bud of love blooms pink only in springtide,

And fades with the beauty of many a flower pied.

But whither thee tarry, O near blazing heart,

Thou shalt be caught on fire whither thou art.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

....and my heart grieves, so. ....and it pretends not what it deserves only in dreams before it is seen in hands such as these, performed in poem. I have nothing creative in my mind at the moment. I, always, think that the reaction another may get from what I write in their poem comments is at the top of my head, but in actuality, it's a crescendo of emotion and a Love for what I feel that is not so easily explained through my simple words. I had a little trouble reading this poem. It wasn't the poem, itself, but rather that the words you chose to use, and I kept reading each and every beautiful line at least TWICE!! lol I was getting confused. I'm not sure why I did that. I get that I Love the way you write, so maybe this was just something weird that happened. I had to read the poem in its entirety when I was dine because.... well, because I like you and your writing is of fine quality to me. I don't know much of my soul. I never felt like I befriended it, but I get to feel it connect to beautiful poems such as yours. I'm yours; you are stuck with me, now, and thankfully!! lol xoxo -Your Mark

Ooooo and what a beautiful name for a poem, too!!

[Hayley]

haha you're going through some of my old poems... how things have changed is amazing...

[Patrick Henry]

Explain! Explain! lol I have only been writing for about two years time, so ALL my poems are around the same time frame. Only about 5 poems are written before Fall, 2011. One poem got me almost kicked off the internet when a site almost got shut down from death threats and stuff...lol It is here now, but in a different time to be seen in a whole new light. The site wasn't a poetry site. It was a political site with my political poem. Whoops!! lol Another one was written when I was 11 and that is on here, too. ; ) It says that it was uploaded in 2011, but is that when it was written? xoox -Mark

[Shiningwolf]

Excellent example of pure poetry my friend.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a lovely poem. It seems that there is no other choice than to be engulfed by the compelling emotions.

[Erinne S.]

I loved the wording in this piece. Made it flow smoothly and the descriptiveness easily helped me picture the scene. Well done!

~Erinne

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Like a flower we must feed love with great care in order for it to bloom for life... great style and creative word choices.

[Viki Rachel]

I love the style of this poem, the old, rare vocabulary and extended lines in the stanza. It must've taken some time to think of. Great job.

[Derek S.Keck]

You wrote this one with a deep elegance, and a lovely rhythm. It sounds almost like a lyrical song of old, when read aloud. I love that opening line and the in depth meaning you wrote into this. Those who live by the sword die by the sword. I love that your speaker realizes that concept from the get go. We don't have to seek revenge; the wicked seek their own destruction by simply being how they are. That second stanza is almost reminiscent of Robert Frost's "nothing gold can stay". You bring it home with the acceptance that nothing is forever, things blossom and wither and it’s just uncontrollable. You're a deep thinker and a life philosopher; I think it shows in your work. Lovely piece!

[Judy Ponceby]

Lovely write.

[Seshat Nidaba]

I love the rhymes, this lines was so beautiful: "So God may tip the boat into gentle lullabies of remorse"

[Chris Smith Welshpoetcs]

You have a beautiful way with words.