Epoch

Telling of a new fear

Epoch 

A nice joint to hide the pain                                

well i just wish i could fade

or run till the earth fell away 

So tired of the weight

Cause i trip and fall with every move i make 

an endless cycle of mistakes 

A useless excuse,

with nothing but excuses

to hide my useless waste of space  

and i see them in my dreams

walking with shuffling feet

eyes down clocking in and out 

no doubt , they've fallen prey 

to the money hungry monster 

they must feed every day

that's my future they say 

and it haunts me cause i have no escape 

growing older, no way to slow it down

no where to turn around

and my childhood fades 

memories escape me 

early stages of alzheimer's disease

but i'm only 18

bad habits are becoming routine 

borderline addiction, causing an affliction

to everyone around me 

selfish, and greedy

i'm nothing new to this world of woes...

Just lost and lonely 

All these things in my head trouble me

No one to talk me down 

And darkness is all i can seem to see

Reviews

[Legacy]

Megan,

The moment we realize life as we know it (as children) is nearing a sad ending... we grow fearful and defensive. Uncertainty of the future is indeed a scary thing - we have a tendency to pick up habits we learned from those who were the closest to us.

This is what adulthood is about right? Losing innocence and gaining the things we didn't like the most about our parents. Indeed, the child is nearing their end and a new creature must step in.

It is a lonely place, yet growing into those shoes happens fairly rapidly and life will become easier once they fit correctly.

I admired the energy of this poem, the honesty of your words and the flow it brings.

Thank you for sharing this poem,

Legacy

This would be a wonderful poem to place in the contest Enlightenment for Poetic Infusion Society.

[BlueLagoon]

Oh man...I can't out-review Legacy but here I go. I can tell that you have soul sister. You seem to know how to pull out a serious topic, sprinkle in intense feeling, and serve it to the reader piping hot. That is excellent. You are no novice in writing; your verses and meanings are deep and metaphorical. Your ideas flow, stick with your subject, and run well from beginning to end. Wonderful poem. The only thing I'd like to see is you differentiate yourself from other writers and add in your own flair. What is your thing? Looking forward to reading more of your works!

[deeps]

I really enjoyed this write, I can feel the emotions in this.
Very nicely written.