Midnight Thoughts

Midnight Thoughts

A Poem by Ella
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Will tomorrow ever come?

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Midnight Thoughts


My scarlet love
Wont you rundown?

My darkest desire
Wont you come out?

My hidden secret
Wont you repeat it?

My fallen trust
Wont you crush
me under your thumb
and love me until i'm all done

Don't abandon me
for i'm so young 
but don't believe tomorrow will ever come

© 2015 Ella


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Ella
Thanks for reading

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there is a darkness permeating your words... the flow of blood exposes the dark desire to free pain by cutting (maybe) and losing trust which has crushed your spirit threatens to leave you but despite you not believing that tomorrow will come, you ask that fallen trust to stay... dark and lonely is the plea... very good writing, Ella

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

Thank you i never really thought about it that way.
....................

4 Years Ago

:D.....I guess we should be thanking you!!
Ella

4 Years Ago

No need to thank me for anything. Its my pleasure really.



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Besides your absence of apostrophes in your "wont"s, you've written something grand here. A lot of juicy lines and an absolutely spine-chilling, but killer ending! Well freaking done!

Posted 10 Months Ago


Simple diction, vibrant approach. =)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you (:
Another elegant piece. I like the message between the lines that comes out. Not the obvious one, but the little fine emotions laces in between the imagery. It was a fine read and I really enjoyed it. :) You're a good writer.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I try to put as much of myself in each poem as i can.
Andrew Rayne

3 Years Ago

It shows. :)
Much better, and more coherent, than my midnight thoughts.

I like it. I can't explain what about it or why, but I like it. That may be because this is a midnight review, though. Not being able to explain, not liking it that is.

I don't know how to english right now.

Point is, 8/8 stars.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

Thanks for liking and reading it. Midnight thoughts (or reviews) are always the best because they te.. read more
I feel a sense of loneliness in this piece with nobody to call your own. The ending is very sad not thinking that there will be a tomorrow or not having any hope for a tomorrow. I say there will be a tomorrow and it is one that may change your life forever. Hope has a funny way of showing up when you least expect it and something new and unexpected may become a gift to you when you need it most.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

I really do hope so.
Robert

4 Years Ago

See you do have hope. It will, trust
It is the darkest secret - I've kept this one as well. I admire the eloquence with which you express your secret and your pain, and most of all your shame. It's all very subtle, but if you've been there, you can see it.

Keep writing. You have talent. And please find a way to share your secret before it's too late.


Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your amazing review. Its nice to know you enjoyed reading this and were able to relate.. read more
this is very dark.......and powerful.......
very smart for poetic perceptions.......
we feel an urge to express ourselves on paper......when we find no one near us capable of understanding us......or qualified enough to share secrets with.........
but we sure do feel insecure.......vulnerable........because.....most people just try to judge us,.....and not comfort us.......such confidant can be found easily in poetry......(your secrets are safe)........you are lucky to have that talent....

amazing write.....
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Pushkar Prabhat

4 Years Ago

you are welcome.........and poetry is a talent........to be proud of......!!! :) :)
Ella

4 Years Ago

Thanks again. I don't think im as good as you think i am but i appreciate it a lot :)
Pushkar Prabhat

4 Years Ago

that is good.........since that help us to get better.......it was my pleasure!!! :) :)
there is a darkness permeating your words... the flow of blood exposes the dark desire to free pain by cutting (maybe) and losing trust which has crushed your spirit threatens to leave you but despite you not believing that tomorrow will come, you ask that fallen trust to stay... dark and lonely is the plea... very good writing, Ella

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

Thank you i never really thought about it that way.
....................

4 Years Ago

:D.....I guess we should be thanking you!!
Ella

4 Years Ago

No need to thank me for anything. Its my pleasure really.

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