Undecided

Undecided

A Poem by Ella

Undecided

Your nothingness is everything
Your evilness my kindness
Your strikes are my pleasure 
You are my world, though I wish you weren't 
You make me go insane in the nicest way. 
I wish you'd just let me go away. 
While you hold me tight in your warm embrace. 
I let a tear slide down my face
and I can't seem to shake this fate
this life i will always hate. 

© 2015 Ella


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Undecided is a perfect title because the poem describes what can only be inner confusion, being torn on many levels, inner wrestlings indeed as Erica points out.

The head versus the heart. You know he is not good for you but you feel love and attraction.

Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words



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Undecided is a perfect title because the poem describes what can only be inner confusion, being torn on many levels, inner wrestlings indeed as Erica points out.

The head versus the heart. You know he is not good for you but you feel love and attraction.

Well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words
love is a drug so easily addicted ..and a junkie's story usually ends sadly...nice writing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
Very well done! One thing I find a most effective tool in poetry is the opposites! Even though the rhymes are a bit too generic to me in here (face, fate, hate, etc.), I really like your opposites, especially how to start off with 'Your nothingness is everything'!':) There is a lot of potential in here!

Posted 3 Years Ago


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I can relate to the feelings of this poem....Wonderful my frnd....Loved the use of words....Thumbs up!!!! God bless you.....

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you. God bless you
Well done Ella, filled with a lot of emotion and feelings. Exactly what a poet should write.

BTW haven't seen you much around lately?

Posted 3 Years Ago


Ella

3 Years Ago

thank you! I'm always happy to read your comments. i know i haven't been around lately i was super b.. read more
I'd like to add on to the previous comment... I have a compilation under the name of "inner-wrestlings" and this fits perfectly. The moment I began reading I thought to myself, how many scars one person obtains through any "complicated" relationship. Channeling the pain into words is actually a great way to cope and overcome- always remember that your fellow readers are here to share and feel your struggles as well; with that being said, I hope that you have found peace. This story is filled with heartbreak but it also has a strong side of power.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Drcicarlo

3 Years Ago

Not to sound stalker-ish- i see you're 17. I'm only 19, closer to turning 20. Not until a year ago i.. read more
Ella

3 Years Ago

Thank you that really means a lot to me. I'm trying to come out of my shell more. I just grew up bei.. read more
Drcicarlo

3 Years Ago

I can painfully relate to that, unfortunately.
I know your journey will be filled with endle.. read more
I really liked this, the way you work with extreme opposites is awesome. Really deep as well,I enjoyed it

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wow Moving Makes Me Think

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

Then i did my job! Thanks for the review!
The first four lines describe what I sense as an abusive relationship...then the fifth, through to the seventh, lines, appear to demonstrate a softer side of the relationship...but the final lines remind us that what we are seeing is the struggle within; the emotional turmoil and feeling of being trapped... clearly a great title for the piece, too...

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ella

4 Years Ago

Thanks for your review! They are always welcomed.

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