The Dark Abyss

I sit alone in the dark

Waiting,

Hoping

For something to find me.

I close my eyes

And whisper secret wishes

To the one who's supposed to be listening.

But no one's there.

I crawl on my knees

In search of something

To save me from my nightmare,

To cradle me from the world.

But I find nothing.

The darkness surrounds me,

Slowly seeping into my every ounce of being.

And I sit there

Letting the poision drip into my blood;

Letting it take over my brain.

I watch silently as the person I once knew

Grows and becomes

The memory of a once good friend.

I no longer see me,

But someone who fades into the blackness.

Someone who's detached from the world.

I move through the darkness

Without a sound,

Unable to speak

Or even cry.

Lips sewn together

By the needle of comforter.

I run through the darkness

Trying to find a way to escape.

But all I find are shadows.

I look up to the world above me,

But the poison has clouded even my eyes.

I stumble to the ground

And can feel myself wasting away.

Face down in the darkness

I remove my the thread that bound me

And cry.

Author's Note

I really tried on this one :) So let me know what you think! Thank you :)

Reviews

[The Chocoholic]

wow. beautifully and deliciously dark. i love it. I'm not sure...it is about losing yourself...in the harshness and coldness of the world?

[-Insertnamehere-]

Very good. Like I said last time, your poetry is too marvelous for you to be a beginner. I like your contrast between the needle and the comforter. One is comforting while the other is sharp. I really also like the style that you wrote it in, it sounded very nice in my head.
Your message in this poem, is outstanding. The hopelessness of losing oneself is indeed a big issue everyone faces, just with socialism and society and the crap in this world through media and such. (I don't know if that was what you were trying to say, but that's part of what I got out of it). I've been down the road you described and you described it well. Hideous, painful, emotional but unable to conquer those emotions enough to feel them.
This is a fabulous poem, great work(:

[KatieDaray]

Very good, Maybe put in 'mind' instead of 'brain'? just a thought :)