Insoluble Love

Hold your hand out.

I wanna give you something.

Tell you something...

I wanna eat sleep and breathe

You...

If only you'd let me.

 

Lets just leave good enough

Alone.

Drink down this carbon based

Life.

 

Hold out your insoluble heart

Put it in my hands

'Cause baby I'll take care of it.

Just let me be the blood

That courses through your veins...

 

Lets just leave good enough

Alone.

Let us drink down this half shelled

Life.

 

Baby, Open your mind

And let me see

All the thoughts that flow inside.

Just think of me...from time to time

 

And leave well enough

Alone.

Let us drink to this demented

Life.

 

Darling, lend me your lips.

I'd bring them to mine...

Devoured with a kiss.

 

Remember when I said

Leave well enough

Alone and

Drink to the Absurdity of it all?

 

Love of all loves

Don't leave me.

 

I'd be the air you breathe

The food you eat

The pillow upon which you sleep...

Hold your hand out.

I wanna give you something.

5/31/09

Author's Note

It took me thirty minutes to write this...um... I wrote it sorta like a song.
It is way more structured than any of my other writings.
The first stanza has six lines.
The third stanza has five lines.
The fifth stanza has four lines.
The seventh stanza has three lines.
The ninth stanza has two lines.
The Chorus part has only four lines within each stanza...you can tell that its the chorus
because it repeats over and over...but everytime that I
restated it ...it goes through some sort of change...
Eventually it just dissapears and where the chorus is supposed to
go next ...it just doesn't...and I take from the beginning the first two lines and I
end it...never actually resolving it with a stanza with one line.

Reviews

[Jason]

Oh, the metaphors....such wonderful use of metaphors...."Lets just leave good enough Alone. Drink down this carbon based Life." I love it! Just as I do everything that you write. You have such an artistic approach to everything you write. It leaves the reader in pure amazement. I really love the way you put yourself out there with lines like " I'd be the air you breathe or the food you eat", Fearless and Brilliant!

Jay

[Flo_writer]

This as sort of a creepy dedication. It's filled with a strong sense of love. Every line is filled with intense passion to be his/her everything. You have a gifted talent, we should all be as focus so spend 30 mins writing our poetry to a certain format.