A Cryptic Message

A Cryptic Message

A Poem by Incandescence

I see you,

arms around her,

I hate you.

You're nothing


A liar.

A promise-breaker.

The truth-hider.

And there isn't


any changing,

in you, is there?

No one has

ever loved you like

I do.

Or, now, did.

You blew it.

The love is gone. So is the

light in my eyes. The


you gave me was fake.

Unreal. A mirrage of

the mind. It's too bad for

you that I no longer love

you still.


© 2011 Incandescence

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Very e.e. cummings. This was interesting and I liked it.

"A mirrage of" should be mirage.

That was all I could find to nitpick at. I liked this. The double message was interesting. I liked the two columns, since the number two in literature means duality, and the speaker is clearly battling two contrasting emotions. Good write.

Posted 9 Years Ago

I loved this so much. Very inspiring and very well written. : )

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on January 22, 2011
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Writing is what I've done my whole life. Sadly, I believe I'm losig my touch. But I will keep trying. No matter how bad my work is. I love Taylor Swift, Paramore, Michael Jackson and John Mayer. They .. more..

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