Tar

Pain is better than Apathy.

Sick of all this tar

I was in so deep

stuck in reopened scars

Lessons weren't complete

 

For reasons I did not know

The roses would  always weep

Frozen and time went too slow

I woke with the stairs' 'creek'

 

Memories non-existant

Only ghosts in my tar

No questions of where we go or went

Since then, I haven't gotten far.

Author's Note

be harsh. ;]

Reviews

[Timothy Morris]

The thing I don't like about rhyme schemes is that a lot of poets butcher syntax in order to acheive them (teaching English will turn that into a pet peeve very quickly). Thankfully, you pull yours off without falling back on such tactics. I enjoyed the fact that the poem was obviously emotional without being overly dark with overtones of "I want to die!" (Those types of poems get under my skin quickly for some reason). You do have a grammar mistake; it should read "...the stairs' 'creek'" and not "...the stair's 'creek'." Of course, if it's only one stair then it's fine, but I assumed you were referencing a set of stairs that lead up to maybe the second floor of a house. ~.^

[Almost Alive]

Be harsh? xD C'mon there's really nothing to be harsh about in this writing, you did it nicely. Expect more of your ;)

[An Open Venue]

This is true too often and it is sad. sometimes we pay dearly because we are not ready to see the truth.

Well done

Ven