Beats

Closed eyes to sense the three beats
two hearts, and the drums
the song moves and takes us with it.
Parted lips, knee and thigh
I hold you touching the white satin
wanting to tear it
instead, I bend down and sniff
the fragrance of soft hair
I feel your breathing, your moving
our tribute to a song, any song
we can move to
under stars, out shone by the reflected
light of our Sun, 
on the sad face of the moon.

I don't want to open my eyes
knowing I'll find it all lies.
If there is a God, please grant me
a heart made from stone.

To make it a little easier to take,
this Being, alone.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

alas, i must concur with Neva...this is superbly morose though. nicely done!

[Claire Twinn]

Lovely and sad

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

heartbreakingly beautiful

[Blue Ivory]

Wow. This is beautiful. I have to appreciate the emotional and touching ending. It's been a while since I've seen you here. Great comeback!

[Mark]

Thanks... have not had much to write about. It comes and goes. :)

[Mockingbird]

very sensual imagery. conveys despair about the situation. great job.

[Leslie Philibert]

and a poem that all who enjoy poetry will like, the rich, photographic imagery of the first verses then the strong, impressive thoughts introduced at the end, fine job.

[Infinite hexes]

So this is about a person wanting to daydream forever because being alone is unbearable? Great poem anyways :)

[Mark]

LOL thanks for your honesty. pretty pathetic huh? :P

[Infinite hexes]

Haha no, no poems pathetic :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this made me think of a favorite song from summer of 1979..."Driver's Seat' by Sniff and the Tears....

there is sadness and anguish in this...so well done, we feel both emotions...
something that can never be the way it used to be...

life changes sometimes...but it is not so easy for us to change with it.

[Frieda P]

Wow,this actually sent a chill through my body. Very stirring read.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

quite an anguished expression, you have captured the intesnity of emotions well I think