Summer Storm

The awesomeness of nature is very hard to capture in pictures let alone words. I was walking in the North Woods near Mount Washington in New Hampshire when a storm came and went.

Heavy warmth encases the earth,

like a sluggish blanket on a restless bed.

First the heavy air and then

The sky opens and rains fall.

Cracked in electric blue, the bright moment 

quickly fades with the rumble of thunder.

As if the sky, seeing the ocean crash on rocks,

decided to do it one better. 

Then did.

Reviews

[Quill~]

Electricity courses through your words.. I especially enjoyed the 1st and 3rd couplets. Beautiful imagery!

[Mark]

thanks for reading!

[Quill~]

:) I reading enjoyed it.

[Casner P]

Imagery. Imagery. Imagery. It honestly didn't take me more than two seconds to envision this summer storm in my head. You did a great job of adding great detail in such a short poem. That is a gift my friend. Job well done, keep up the good work!

[Mark]

Thank you Casner :)

[Baby Ricochet]

This is a great poem. I live on the gulf coast of florida and watching the big summer thunder storms roll off the gulf is nothing short of incredible.

[Mark]

Thanks BR, I was living up in the White Mountains, Northern NH when Iwrote this.

[LJW]

Indeed.

It's just like that, every once in awhile.

Like a sluggish blanket on a restless bed.

I'd steal that line, but I promised my parole officer I'd be good this week.

I'm fanatical about last lines. Go out big. You did.

My car climbed Mt. Washington. :-)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Within the arm's reach of a breif second,
The sky opens and rains fall. -- These are my favorite lines. Something about the rain and the "opening sky" always gets me going mentally.

Lots of good imagery, and I truly love the subtlety.

[Mark]

thank you Sarah, glad to get you going, even if it is only mentally :P

[Sarah Khalil]

I have a thing for storm imagery, and the imagery here is as sharp as a haiku. It flows beautifully.

[Mark]

Thank you Sarah!

[quinfinn]

this one crackles with life, every couplet another master stroke with the painters brush, well penned!

[SyberRose]

I enjoyed reading...I also liked the electric blue color...nicely penned...Rose:)

[Mark]

Thank you Rose :)

[Angi]

This is so crashingly good, Mark. I have done a storm poem myself. You are so right, very hard to capture the ferocity of a storm in words. I really felt this! Angi~

[Mark]

Thank you :)