Opposites

Opposites

A Poem by Inyourshadow
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break ups

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Damn the dark
             and break the glass

ignite the spark
             and light the gas

silence the tongue
             and blind the eyes

make all rights wrong
             and all truths lies

forget my name
             forsake my heart
turn love to shame
              and let us part

© 2011 Inyourshadow


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Inyourshadow
whatever it makes you feel

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I love the rhyme and form you took with this one. Very well done. Keep on penning.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Baz
Very nicely constructed. Deceptively intricate, given the short line length. The alternate line rhyme structure helps the whole thing flow very smoothly. Nice one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


No way... Lily Mae wants a Happy Ending...the world has to many nasty endings ;)
In all seriousness this is a powerful and well stated write... but I still have a case don't I??? Damn romantic.. I'll die alone and a sage somewhere lol..xo

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on September 26, 2011
Last Updated on September 26, 2011
Tags: pain, angst, brokenhearted, need, dark

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Inyourshadow
Inyourshadow

United Kingdom



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I am trying to broaden my abilities as a writer, hoping to learn new styles and ways to express myself. I am married with 4 kids and a beautiful grandson, plus my two wonderful yorkshire terriers T.. more..

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