Lost Girl

Lost Girl

A Poem by The Iron Horseman
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A heavy rocker about a beautiful but troubled punk girl.

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She had psychedelic hair,

It was all purples and pinks,

She'd do anything for a dare,

She was a real little minx.


She wore a real short skirt,

With stockings and heels,

She was one hell of a flirt,

With a great set of wheels.


Her glittering top,

Was cut real low,

She never knew when to stop,

She couldn't go slow.


Chorus

She was born to be wild,

She was born to be free,

She was a problem child,

She was my honey bee.


She played with fire,

But she never got burned,

Till one day she blew a tire,

And her whole world turned.


Down became up,

Up became down,

The sheriff showed up,

And ran her out of town.


Chorus



Now there's no more honey,

There's no more bee,

Ain't life funny?

Does she still miss me?


Chorus


(Fade out)

She's a lost girl...


Just a lost girl...


My lost girl....


Yeah, she's lost!




© 2018 The Iron Horseman


© 2018 The Iron Horseman


Author's Note

The Iron Horseman
This is a heavy rocker. I can see Def Leppard performing this one. I wish!

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Overall, this is well-crafted, sounds lyrical with strong rhyme & rhythm, compelling storyline. The only thing I don't like is that you call her a honey bee. That just sounds too sweet for your poem. Similarly, blew a tire does not fit with your ongoing metaphor at all. Aside from those two details, it's great! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Margie. The 'honey bee' was intended to be anachronistic - just my warped sense of humor at .. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

Yes, definitely a fun ditty with unexpected details!



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This is super. catchy,cleverly done and lyrically perfect. When you recording it?

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Thanks again, Dawn. You really don't want to hear me sing! But feel free to send me your version! :).. read more
Yes, this would make a pretty cool song-- all the best songs are really poems anyway!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Thanks, NS. I couldn't agree more!
Loved the "Down became up..etc."..First song I think I've ever reviewed but certainly would be interested in the musical aspects Don't see this as a waltz but I am constantly surprised playing guitar myself. I like the story and now that I just saw the "heavy rocker' note I would have to agree only I'd go AudioSlave if Chris were still around or Jack White.. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Perdition. Either of those two would also be good choices. If you play around with it on .. read more
Perdition

1 Year Ago

Absolutely..though I have turned to the Taylor which is acoustic and some flamenco just to keep my i.. read more
The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Same to you, my friend. Enjoy your weekend.
would be good to hear it as you do Iron ... not much on heavy rockin' ..i will have to check out some of Def Leppard ... see what i can imagine .. nice description of the girl ... she's your honey bee eh!? ;))
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

yesh...i did ... they aren't quite maxed out heavy in my opinion .. they do have some artistry in th.. read more
The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

That's exactly right. One of the most impressive performances I have seen of them is a video of them.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) .................
Great piece. It flows well.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Declan

1 Year Ago

Very interesting.
I look forward to reading your stuff.
The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Please do. The novel will not be on here though, for contractual reasons.
Declan

1 Year Ago

Sure, I understand.
how about rich girl by H @ O

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Nice to hear from you again, Julie. I was thinking I might have offended you! :D
Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)

1 Year Ago

no way not offended just time short i work full time and dont get to read all replies etc till sunda.. read more
The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Good to know. Have a great week.
love this really enjoyed it, what tune or rhythm are you going to use
give an eg of a song similar on you tube and ill humm it
no you dont want to hear my voice but i found this a great piece great for a song

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Jules. Glad you like it. Armageddon It by Def Leppard is about as close as i can get for you.. read more
Overall, this is well-crafted, sounds lyrical with strong rhyme & rhythm, compelling storyline. The only thing I don't like is that you call her a honey bee. That just sounds too sweet for your poem. Similarly, blew a tire does not fit with your ongoing metaphor at all. Aside from those two details, it's great! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The Iron Horseman

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Margie. The 'honey bee' was intended to be anachronistic - just my warped sense of humor at .. read more
barleygirl

1 Year Ago

Yes, definitely a fun ditty with unexpected details!

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Added on October 12, 2018
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Tags: punk, song, lyric, rock, love, loss, rebellion, beauty, fun, sheriff

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The Iron Horseman
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Aspiring new writer. I enjoy writing stories, poems and song lyrics. In fact most of my poems are song lyrics! All constructive input is welcome. If you think something sucks, tell me so. I won't be o.. more..

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