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                  I've merely stepped on-over, the entrance of my ordeal

                  The feelings through my chest, tightens well against my will.

                  The associated-perplexity of moving further in

                  Saddest in transition as resentment stirs on whim

                  Knowing aptly well, this test now-overdue...

                  I drag my feet in sluggishly, my stomach feeling ill

                  Passing through the gate now, feel, the air--sanguine

                  Feeling slightly dejected, by time loss that yields within

Author's Note

Please offer some hard critiques.

Reviews

[Rossen]

I relate to this poetry, you have a voice that connects to humanity....
I would like to kindly offer a soft critique.
most readers seem to connect with dark clouds....with at least a small
ray of sunshine on the horizon...
or better put, I get few reviews without hope attached...
I think it is hard to review the negative in a positive light.
By giving the caf'e reviewer positive talking points you will
gather more feedback, nothing wrong with your well written
poetry.
ps~this café will offer few hard critiques.

Rossen

[A love for poetry]

Thank you for the feed back. I like feed back, and I am sure a most people do; so thank you for your comments.