Green Machine

                                  Four finger sleeves

                       V-neck pressed collars

                       Square pressed pockets,

                       Lines across the back--the sailed seas

                       The green beret, sharp across the eye, shaven, lintless

                       Boots shinier than a clear moon

                       Chiseled chins murmur;

                                       

                                        Go shove that drill cane up your arse sarge!

Reviews

[Rossen]

As I read I was hoping for a sharp turn around,
bam right in the kisser! good write...

[A love for poetry]

Thank you :) "and bam! Right in the kisser" I laughed a lot from your expression here.

Thank you.

[Rossen]

one of these days Alice one of these days...

[Damien Davison]

I did quite enjoy this, made me laugh, I agree with Tate on the it reminding me of Full Metal Jacket in a way. Very original, not something I'm used to reading, which was refreshing!

[A love for poetry]

^_^ Thank you. This I think, was the general feelings expressed on the drill square, and the sneaky muttering and mocking, going on between the ranks.

Thank you for the review.

[Damien Davison]

Haha, sounds risky! From what I hear anyways, never enlisted. Thanks for writing!

[justjenn_2u]

Strength in words - my summary. Simply stated with a clear message. A good piece.

[A love for poetry]

Thank you very much Justeen.

[David Scott]

I see you may have some military experience. Ha
Love the last line. It gives the tone and makes you wan to re read the poem with that tone in mind. Good write Isaac.

[A love for poetry]

Thank you.

[The Refined Poet]

great build... the ending, what an impact! nicely crafted, I could see the men standing there dressed and pressed... well done

[A love for poetry]

Thank you

[Tate Morgan]

Are you eyeballing me private? LOl loved this reminded me of full metal jacket

[A love for poetry]

Thank you

[Stanley Wilson]

good work i can relate to it

[A love for poetry]

Thank you

[Mic]

Surprised me with the finale. Ha!

Not usually fond of wandering lines just for the visual, but this works. Good imagery, march... then wham!

I like it!

[A love for poetry]

hank you for your comment, I decided the wandering lines weren't necessary, now it looks better I think, the 5th line just pokes out too far; looks a bit strange...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An expressive and well painted poem with a passion in its mesage. Well writen, flows well. A good read!

[A love for poetry]

Thank you very much.

[Sirius King]

lol nice

[A love for poetry]

Thank you.