Day Dream

Enjoy a world of freedom.

Free yourself from a clouded mind,

And enter a world of day dreaming and lost time.

Where I go is beautiful and an array of shine,

Where pain dies and happiness flies.

It's your own little world,

One you make on your own.

You can create the grass and skies,

And you can forget all the lies!

So free yourself from a clouded mind,

and enter a world of day dreaming and lost time.

Say goodbye to your stress and worries,

And make a world full of fun-filled stories.

Author's Note

I was bored..... And I randomly wrote this. I guess it's good enough to share. Lol

Reviews

[Saddam]

It's your own little world,
One you make on your own.
You can create the grass and skies,
And you can forget all the lies!

It is one of those kind of poetry which suggess you and define your path. My favorite, and beautifully done your job dear.

[Cierra]

Thank you!!

[Patricia]

Lovely! It is lighthearted and dreamy....well done. :)

[Allen Smuckler]

good illusion Cierra
glad you were bored
we all need a place to go to hide
explore
and float away…
allen

[Cierra]

Thank you!

[DaughterNature]

It's cute, but the description feels very superficial. Remember that, when writing poetry, each word needs to be chosen carefully, so make sure that your images are fresh and original so that your poetry is memorable. I also wonder about your chosen rhyme scheme. As I scan it, it seems to be AAAA BCAA AADD -- was that intentional? If you did not intend a specific rhyme scheme, then it feels odd to have so many rhyming words ending the lines that are not organized with any purpose.

[Cierra]

I honestly just write without a care lol. It's not really anything I posted for praise. Haha. I honestly started rhyming unintentionally and didn't really notice it until after I got ready to post it.

Like I said, I just write to write. Whatever comes to mind. Haha

[NoelHC]

A well done piece of work Cierra, and it works quite well. I like what you did with the repetition of the two lines it, is very effective.
Good work!

[Cierra]

Thank you!