Life's Fire

A poem/song to be sung to the tune of "Help Me Make It Through the Night"

 

Yesterday's fire kissed the sun

burning skies with ecstasy

now I step into the light

set ablaze and running free

 

Flaming torches glow within

sweet time flows with my desire

nature sings with happiness

flowers blossom with life's fire

 

You have come and now I laugh

tickled by your poetry

I am singing and alive

shining bright and dancing free

 

Sadness vanished and I smile

hearing birds sing like a choir

basking in a time of love

flowers blossom with life's fire

 

When I lie within your arms

holding my sweet destiny

I see watercolored dreams

painted visions pleasing me

 

Come tomorrow tears may fall

memories of my desire

but tonight you are still here

flowers blossom with life's fire

 

I rejoice to be alive

flowers blossom with life's fire

 

 

Reviews

[wordman]

a beautiful write longing,playful desires tomorrow you may be a dream but tonight you are mine
I enjoyed the read and thanks again

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you for taking the time to read my poem and leave such nice thoughts behind. They have made my morning very bright.

[Anand Sehgal]

I rejoice to be alive
flowers blossom with life's fire

marvelous :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Armand. Your vey nice comment has made getting up at 5 AM a much more pleasant experience than usual. Hope your day is a bright one.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Sorry for getting your name wrong the first go around, Anand. I'm a bit more awake now and see my mistake. Have a great day! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wasn't that sammi smith? who did that song originally?

good song.

[Joyce S. Greene]

I just Googled it and it was Kris Krisofferson (sp?) It's one of my favorite songs.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, Kris wrote it...and sammi smith recorded it in 1971...was a pretty big hit for her. Made number 8 on billboard...Kris wrote so many good songs.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Yes, he did. I saw him in a newish movie within the past couple of years. Not bad as I recalll.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i also like this moment you create...

the here the now...lying in your arms, i embrace the passion...come what may tomorrow, i will live for today...with you.

really nice wording...so smooth.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Writing tanka nowadays, I am always trying to catch the moment and make it last forever. Guess I was doing it when I wrote this poem/song a few years ago and didn't even know it. Thank you for your really insightful comment. Often, I find I learn things about myself and my poems from readers.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the same happens for me, joyce...i often learn through interpretations what i was thinking that i didn't even know i was thinking.

[Joyce S. Greene]

You're right, Jacob. Me, too. I wrote a tanka about that before I wrote this poem. Maybe I'll dig it out and post it. It may be crude, but it expresses the thought.

[Rita L. Sev]

This is really lovely - well done rhythm and rhyme. I read it through, then read it again adding the melody - beautiful both ways. Reading this piece lifted my spirits, Joyce!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Rita! Your words have made my evening a lot brighter. This is a poem I wrote a few years ago, so I may just unpack a few more. Your words make me smile. :)

[Emerald Seas]

An easy flow and rhythm to this poem. I enjoyed the read and definitely felt the song.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you for your very encouraging words. I'm not used to getting feedback on my writes, so to hear from you and other poets means a whole lot to me.

[Lydia Shutter]

"Life's fire" yes, that is what poetry is all about. Inspiration in the little things, freedom to express oneself, freedom to drink in life's beauty! The images this poem paints are so lovely. "Watercolored dreams" and a romantic destiny filled with words. The feeling of abandoning all stress within the lines of a poem....or in a lover's arms....was strong.
"You have come and now I laugh tickled by your poetry I am singing and alive shining bright and dancing free" What could be sweeter than this! You have sparked "life's fire" with every line of this well written poem, Joyce. Great work! Lydi**

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, Lydi. Your comment is a poem and I have truly enjoyed reading it. I am honored to have received so much positive feedback from a poet as gifted as you.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...A beautiful song...:)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Sami, for your very nice words. This is a bit of a departure from what I write these days - I wrote it a few years ago and now write mostly Eastern form poetry. But it is one of my favorites and I wanted to share it with the poets here on WC. Thanks again for commenting so positively on my poetry. I will read yours very soon.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow . Good to know . You are welcome...:)

[Kelly Scheppers]

Your rhyme is perfect, Joyce...and I love the repetition of the line, "flowers blossom with life's fire" throughout the poem. I thought the two line closure was quite lovely, as well!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks for the very nice comment, Kelly. It helped make my evening more pleasant.