Trains

Climb on top of a runaway train
Sprint all day and night
Just to see that Beauty again

Pushing through and through
Aching bones and sweat in my eyes

But its still just so far away
Always a long way gone

Cold wind bites the skin
Don`t know what state I`m in

Who are you trying to be
Where are you trying to go

Riding atop wild runaway trains
Hitchhiking out of the jungle of my mind

Just to get out of this mess
Just to see her again

Pushing forward through the night
Tired bones protecting a broken spirit

Following a lost cause
Chasing a broken Dream

Yet, I keep pushing forward
Because this is all I have

 

Reviews

[C. Rose]

Congratulations!

This piece is a finalist for Promote Me! VI (Peace).
As your reward I have sent 115 read requests on your behalf.

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[Life Pal]

Good poem, some where in our life we need to do this, to push ourselves to achieve something.

[EdgarLovecraft]

Good rhythm and well constructed

[Paige]

Ah this relates to my current life so well. Pushing my self to a breaking point for something that's not even touchable, yet my dreams keeping urging me to push on. Very nicely done.

[Sami Khalil]

You can be running away from something or trying to reach your destination to see that Beauty again. A splendid poem...:)...........

[CoraZanini]

Pushin forward is the only answer my friend."Who are you trying to be
Where are you trying to go" Something that bothers me for a long period of time now. I love this poem and I will come back for more,keep me informed John:)

[John Ryan]

thank you :)

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you can check out my past writing if you would like to in the meantime

i greatly appreciate the good thoughts :)

[Ren Grace]

We all have to try our hardest and do all that we can in the tough times of our lives. This poem really depicts what the journey of overcoming obstacles is like. Amazing read!

[Madalyn Beck]

This is a great line! We all are a little broken down sometimes thanks to life's never ending obstacles, but we must push on. I adore the following line. Great work! (:

"Tired bones protecting a broken spirit"

[A. Amos]

Ryan, as always I love your work and this one you pour your soul into your words...especially last four lines were deep powerful and truly honest. We all keep working on our broken dreams and while keep pushing or chasing them our life ends. Epic!