HATE

I hate being scared.

I hate not knowing.

I hate being unprepared.

I hate feeling alone

I hate it when you aren’t there.

I hate not wanting to go home.

I hate not going anywhere

I hate who I am

I hate being me

I hate not having a friend

I hate it all can’t you see?

Reviews

[S. Michael Long]

yeah! yeah! this is nice (: the only thing i can be a critic about is, how you wrote, i hate being alone and hate not wanting to go home, put them together so it reads congruently. you should use the rhyme one after another so its near the middle since you don't emphasize rhyme in the whole poem. put the end rhyme verses one after another (put them in the middle) and leave the others alone. this poem needs to come to a point, (meaning it needs to be sharper) you can use the "home" and "alone" rhyme to sharpen the edge of the poem if you put them together (: you are a great writer! -s

[zero binty]

Focusing on hate can go either way. If you stay focused on it you grow cynical. If you take the lessons from what you hate and find out what you love, the world opens a little wider for you. I do like this piece though.

Hate always comes with love. Learn to LOVE the things you hate

[Marie]

Those are a lot of things to hate...I can feel the negativity coming off this poem...

[J. J. Nightingale]

I HATE TO SEE YOU STUCK IN THIS MOOD ..

I HEAR YOUR SHOUTS .. JAZZ

[Who Cares]

I hate a majority of the things you listed as well. I also like the fact that you chose hate to be your word rather than dislike, hate i sso much stronger in meaning. The last liine is a big finisher, saying you hate it all give you a kind of depressing finish and I have to say that I like it. Your two lines "I hate who I am, I hate being me" really hit home for me because that is how I used to be. I used to hate the world in all of its entirey. Life just sucked and I can personally relate to your work making it absolutely amazing in my eyes. I am always impressed by your work and this was no exception. Great job and I cannot wait to read more of your work.

[Raven Starhawk]

I truly can see these words and relate to them every step of the way. I cannot impress upon you enough how strongly this poem does identify with me and vise versa. ^^* Great write.

[Nautili]

Love the boldness of this piece. I know my daughter has the same feelings. (She will be 16 this month.) Sometimes I just want to hug her and assure her it gets better as you get older. I would like to do the same for you.....these are tough times and you are in the tough years. It does get better, wait and see.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Isn't it time to turn around and face love? Good write, keep writing:)

[Sunflower 20]

great piece! i liked the way you repeated the same statement for each line. It emphasised the emotions really well. i think everyone can relate to the emotoins you express here. great job! :)

[closed..acct]

Very nicly done, love the set up.