another love story...

Why can’t you see?

What you truly mean to me?

You helped me become who I wanna be.

We began to love, passionately.

That one special day, you on the ground, on one knee

Years past, now I’m expecting your baby...

I just want to thank you for everything you gave me.

Reviews

[Michelle_H]

Short and simple, but cute! I like it.

[Honey54]

SHORT SIMPLE AND SOO SWEET AND CUTE! GREAT JOB GIRL!

[Vivere ad mihi, mi Deus]

AAAwWWWW, this is so sweet and loving!!!

[Becky Clancy]

I love this one to, its really cute :3

[Emerald Seas]

A short & sweet work that is very cute. Love the colors!

[Geraldine]

LOVED it LOVED it LOVED it. ^^

[Missy Moooooo]

Awh. This is sweet.

[S. Michael Long]

another great poem, but you have to get rid of the slang, its unnecessary, (the wanna be part, try want to be) you can get your reader closer to your point, by saying, We loved passionately, you either loved or you didn't love, you either began or you finished. LOVED this, but i want to know more.. what happens next? Whats the Score?

[Who Cares]

I love how you made the hole poem rhyme granted it only consist of seven lines but still. This story you tell in the poem is so sweet and it is admirable. Nice work Jenn

[MOON]

Lovely rhyme scheme.The fairytale.