(not finished) Ugly.

No plastic surgery.

No cosmetics of any kind,

Have what it takes to make my face fine.

When I stare at my reflection,

I don’t see beauty

All I see is beast within me.

My voice is all scratchy,

Not fair on poor ears,

You’d wish for my voice box to just disappear.

Author's Note

Hey guys, this is what I've been working on today...What do you think so far?? Should I continue??

Reviews

[Ragin Cajun]

I like it so far. I think you should finish it.

[R J Askew]

Yes, continue. Do a sceond verse and let's hear the other side of the case! Go for it!

[Renée]

Well wh t do you think? I think you should end on a positive note..eh?

[Rusty]

I would like to see you expand the idea and revise and see where it goes.

[MoriartyMesa]

I understand the theme, just not sure if this is a personal thought or not.

[Brianna Van Zandt]

This is good. Definitely keep going. I do think that, perhaps, you should reword one line: "All I see is beast within me." I think maybe you should put a 'the' in there. "The beast" seems to flow better to me.

[Layla J Omorose]

Def continue this I want to see where you are going to go with this.

[quixotic_rose]

Aw this has so much potential to be super duper uber amazing! Definitely keep going with this one I feel you'll have a strong ending with it. :)

[Jeanette]

YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL!!! =)

And the poem is also nice.... :)

[Extant]

Continue this, absolutely. I would suggest simply going over and refining your lines, maybe adding a few more comparisons. I love the words so far, though.