Joplin

About the Joplin tornado, and the aftermath.

The light fades and brings in the dark

With it's traps and dangers

That can't be conquered

And the night screams

At the land of Joplin

Winds awake in cruelty

Painful shrieks and rage

Black on fast moving black

Hurls it all away

In the land of Joplin

Screeching stone

And winds fast as planes

Batter the unsheltered

So strong the vortex

That pulls trees from the ground

In the land of Joplin

A place once safe

Considered tranquil

Now structures bend

While broken steel litters the ground

In the land of Joplin

Broken shells of people

Tears lost to a destroyed land

Surviving creatures join

To restore a sane life

To the land of Joplin

Reviews

[M.Babu]

The devastation brought by these disasters always leaves physical and mental scars and lacerations. Brought out descriptively and skillfully in order to achieve the intended effect: Sentiment.

Nicely done!

~M.Babu~

[Francesca]

This poem drew me in and was really descriptive. You described the fear and destruction really well. The last stanza was especially touching. Great poem :)

[Renay]

"Broken shells of people
Tears lost to a destroyed land
Surviving creatures join
To restore a sane life
To the land of Joplin"

This stanza is my favorite in the poem. The whole poem rings true about natural disasters but this last stanza really got to me. Describing the people as Broken Shells, and how the "Surviving creatures join to restore a sane life" just really pulled at me. :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

I can replace Joplin with several different names...

Xenia, Tuscaloosa, Northwood, Natchez, Tupelo, Gainesville, et al.

Nice work, you may have created a template work for future disasters.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This reveals the tragedy of Joplin so very well. It is well penned and great imagery. Awesome job, Jake.

[Lily Mae]

You have penned the emotions about this very well..xxx

[Rayne Stanton]

Nicely done :)

[Althelia Marie Caine]

Awesome, Jake:)

[brenda]

this is triple wow!! this is amazing so descriptive !! in every way ! keep writing!

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Strong description of the tragedy that happened there. I've seen a few communities demolished by tornadoes and it's horrifically amazing. Check the second line of the poem, though--"it's" should be "its." Also, in the line "black on fast moving black," you might try to find a stronger adjective than fast-moving.