As the sun shone outside

As the sun shone outside

A Poem by JanieB

As the sun shone outside

 

As the sun shone outside

All I could see was darkness

A big black hole

Waiting to envelope me

 

As I thought of good times

Bad ones swamped my thoughts

Of dark moments

Of very sad times

 

Despair and fear

Panic and anxiousness

Anger and loneliness

A feeling of being out of control

 

When will this end?

These feelings of helplessness

Feelings of angst

Feelings of suicide?

 

I can’t see through the other side of the tunnel

This black tunnel of such pain

Pain almost indescribable

Is there light at the end?

© 2012 JanieB


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This piece reminds me of a time back when for a moment I lost all chance for hope and this write describes a lot of what can go through one’s mind. But I did say for just a moment because like all things the sun does shine again.
Excellent write.



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I would love an answer that question. Is there light at the end? I like that your pieces are all relatable, that is so not a word. Haha.

Posted 10 Years Ago


You brought out so much pain in this poem for the readers, I felt the pain and the agony of wanting to find the light at the end!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this, I love how you also ended it with a question. Good Luck :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This piece reminds me of a time back when for a moment I lost all chance for hope and this write describes a lot of what can go through one’s mind. But I did say for just a moment because like all things the sun does shine again.
Excellent write.



Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flawless within it's execution, well done, good read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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JanieB
JanieB

Paphos, Europe, Cyprus



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I started writing in October '10. A real new bee to this world of writing. I currently live in Cyprus, where I have been since 2005. I am British, and have spent many years living abroad. Please j.. more..

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