Mating Rituals

As requested by CD

The warm evening breeze 

Caresses my skin as I sit 

 Beneath the old garden elm. 

The chatter of birds echoes

 Through the trees as they perform 

Their spring mating ritual. 

Redbirds, mocking-jays, and hummers 

Scurry from limb to limb, jealously 

 Chasing foe from new-found lovers.

Enjoying the serious antics, 

I hear the voice of the mourning dove 

Calling its forever mate in the distance. 

My thoughts turn to my own mate. 

No longer within my sight 

I remember your every detail as last seen. 

You have left me as a bird in winter: 

Sure to return to this nest 

As time marches slowly, 

And yet I ponder the burning question 

Weighing upon my soul. 

"Did you take out the trash, Dear?"

Reviews

[Abderrahmane Dakir]

I like so much theses lines My thoughts turn to my own mate. No longer within my sight I remember your every detail as last seen. It's so romantic. I learn a lot from this wonderful poem. It expresses the last seen and the happiest memory. You also used the drama. I felt at the confluence of leaving and romantic moments.Thanks for sharing.

[JayceeC]

Thanks for stopping by and reading. I'm happy that you feel you can learn something by reading my writing that will improve your own.

[CD Campbell]

I really like the three line stanzas. The third stanza. Maybe change jealousy to jealously and foe to foes. That was the only one I was kind of stuck on. Just a minor suggestion and it may not even sound right to you. The last line of course was meant to be playful and I liked it, but you could easily rewrite the last stanza and turn this into something serious and beautiful without it coming off as a sappy mess which is easy with love poems. Nice work with the odd nail driven into the antique. CD

[CD Campbell]

BTW, you're a weenie for mentioning me. Thanks though.

[JayceeC]

Your the one that told me to write more twists, so this is what you've gotten. The jealousy did not catch that when I looked. written from my phone so sometimes I think I've hit one option when it really the other.
Do you really think anyone really reads the descriptions besides you? LOL
So you would have enjoyed more as a pastoral rather than a twist?

[CD Campbell]

Either way. Save both for future submissions.

[Willard Wells]

Twisted. Twisted Sister that's who you are. I love this. As with others your ending gives it the twist. Thanks for sharing and having fun and smiling.

[JayceeC]

Thanks Willard. I used to write these all the time for fun. After I explained to CD that I lost them when the forum closed...he told me to get to writing..so here we go.. Glad it made you smile! I do so enjoy entertaining.

[Willard Wells]

You may be doing this now. But I back up to the cloud. I can access from anywhere.

[JayceeC]

I do but the ones I lost were on a forum 10 yrs ago before they were a cloud. I had a page where people would just set out topics or challenges. .some I kept on my hard drive wich crashed and was unrecoverable. ..thank the heavens for clouds!

[Willard Wells]

I keep a couple of HD at home and the computer and the cloud, but my computer background is the reason. I have been playing with computers in one form for many years and am a consultant for document storage and retrieval. Really any form of document management.

[JayceeC]

My brother does the same but his company contracts service to generally pharmaceutical companies. When he couldn't recover anything with his wizardry and tools I knew I was screwed. I now have jump drives clouds (multiple) as well as multiple writing sites. He's 13yrs older so I was learning computers when I was a kid..but have not stayed very current with code writing. I just do the basics in html. But Ivcan wire and network. ..lol

[Willard Wells]

I don't code anything. I was a computer programmer or at least that was my title and job. Way outside of my brain function. When you get a machine dump on green bar in assembler code and you are attempting to find an error in an entire accounts payable/receivable system you wrote. It was drinking time. Which to me meant a different line of work. LOL

[JayceeC]

I think my brother thinks in binaries...he's a bit crazy like that. But it was impossible to live with him and not learn something. My first computer project in Jr. High was to create a song with visuals in DOS (early 80's). He encouraged me to create "Stairway to Heaven" everyone else did things like Mary Had a Little Lamb. I'd come home and sit on our Commodore 64 and work at home so I could finish on time. I stll can't believe I let him talk me into it or that the teacher approved it. I think she though I'd complete one verse instead of the whole song...lol.
would hate to be looking though lines and lines of code for errors. It would definitely be drinking time

[Willard Wells]

We are on different levels of some similar brain activity that drives us. Some like you for more good which is standard for the female of the species. As for me my goal is good, but my brain does not settle enough for long term things unless I really like them. Like writing, photography, working out. But even in these I have my levels I can not reach. But I have accepted me for who I am and I consider myself to be controlled and a romantic. And at peace with my inner self and what ever demons that may roam around within the realm of the dark rooms within my brain. ROFLMAO

[JayceeC]

Zen with demons..you crack me up..LOL

[Willard Wells]

You get me. Not sure if that's good.

[JayceeC]

Funny I have several friends who say that. Not sure I want to ecplore what it means.

I'm happy with my ignorance. ..LOL

[Taylor]

Again, Jan, I enjoyed this, especially the marvelous twist at the end. That IS the burning question as every woman knows.

[JayceeC]

Well he comes and goes all the time, the trashmen only show once a week!

[wordman]

you remember every detail,then you go back to reality

[JayceeC]

Yes, This one is not quite as intense as My Stalker but CD challenged me to write more satire poems.

[Perkele.7885]

Aren't you the typical female of the species

[JayceeC]

And that suprisescyou how? Have I ever claimed to be anything but wholly fale?

[Perkele.7885]

Maybe, that it would be all that important to you!

[JayceeC]

Well if he didn't take ot out I would have to. Think of my nails..lol