Moonlight Echoes

Moonlight's tresses
caress his face in stark
relief, teasing eyes and
cheeks stained with shadow.

Scorched pungency
of crackling summer earth
weaves around, dancing
with musky cologne and
floral overtones.

Softly, a barn owl's hoo-hoot
fills the midnight air,
answered by a wickering mare
stomping her hoof in agreement.

Nuzzling into his shoulder,
rooted by masculine arm,
I add a gust of contentment to
calls of whippoorwill and larks
feasting on clicking crickets.

The jingle of metal on
metal and quick heavy panting
intrudes upon the interlude
with a nudge at the knees by a
cold, moist nose.

Briefly we turn inward connecting
breath and lips in banked
passion and affirmation.

Glancing at barn doors and gates,
we turn in tandem, connected in
choreographed steps of legs and hips;
arms anchored loosely.

We exit nature's opera
spotlighted in celestial beam,
making our way through
crowds of bluestem and dove weed.

At the patio door,
we turn back for one
last standing ovation;
paying respect to nighttime's show.

The gliding of glass and metal
whisper as we step
over the threshold
into our private ballet
dancing to the echoes of nature.

Reviews

[dan]

Nature's awesome melodic symphony of sounds and textures is poetic in its call to take heed. The imagery that you employ is flawless and breathtaking; every word is right where it belongs. I felt as though I was standing in a moon-bathed clearing soaking in the operatic performance by nature's minstrels. Outstanding wordplay and cadence. Very well done, Jan. take care...dan

[JayceeC]

Dan, Thanks so much for taking the time to stop by and read. I'm glad you were able to soak in the ambiance.
trying to get caught up on return comments and reviews toda. *hugs*

[Chris]

Some moments have an inherent "smile", others well, tears come to mind. Farms and/or ranches were a life for most - now that's mostly past though a few DO survive ...finding heart though - that's timeless.

[JayceeC]

Hello, dear poet. Nice to see you dropping in. I can't imagine living without the ranching way of life. It's pretty ingrained, but this, well, I wanted to create being in the moment, appreciating it, and enjoying it together. Maybe give others a glimpse of something they are not privileged to experience. It was an AP contest write, and overall satisfied with the outcome, I think.

[Érenn]

Wow Hello Again ^^ . It seems every time I stop by at your page to read a peace you almost leave me speechless (i doubt I could comment otherwise) There's so many things here that I like. The structure the certain rhythm created when one reads the tonal transitions even within the tranquility ^^ are superb. Also the use of alliterations is quite exquisite and the picture you have painted on the canvas with your words here can really soothe a reader. A very sensual write indeed ^^


But other than that a very enjoyable read about nature which you have penned it so well ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[Érenn]

Well this is just something I spotted though: making or our way through I think you meant 'for' and not 'or' sorry didn't mention it before ^^'

[JayceeC]

Thanks for the typo. actually wrote this on my phone so sometimes it puts in two words intead of one or the other. Not sure why I did not catch it, so thanks.

I am glad you enjoy my writing and continue to read and comment. Thank you for your wonderful review.

[Antoñyo]

A tranquil revisited memory captured on the canvas of senses, thoroughly enjoyed.
Thanks for the vivid share.

[JayceeC]

Welcome to my pages and thank you for the kind review. Your words are appreciated.

[emmajoy]

Such a graphically beautiful poem. It gently slides this reader into a sweet, comfortable bubble . think i could stay forever. Sigh.

Superb touches of theatre, vocal tableaux, truly exquisite phrases, '..I add a gust of contentment to calls of whippoorwill and larks - - feasting on clicking crickets. '

[JayceeC]

LOL Em, somehow when you add it to the review it does sound theatrical and even a bit overdramatic. Thanks for the wonderful review. Sometimes its nice to just sit back and enjoy nature.

[emmajoy]

I didn't mean 'theatrical' in a negative way, dear you, more that your words were presented as if gifts to your readers... this is how it is, bathe in what you feel and see.

I truly didn't mean 'theatrical' in a negative way, more that you presented the passion in such an open and free manner.. nothing regretted or apologised fo. Your poem is a superb piece of writing..

[JayceeC]

LOL, not taking it that way, hun, your meaning was clear. Evidently I'm in the mood to laugh at myself today. And I fully acknowledge that I have this small part or persona that it totally theatrical. Maybe from performing in musical theatre during my college years, but I sometimes see peeks in my own work. It just makes me smile at myself when I recognize it, so absolutely no offence taken. I love your reviews.

[emmajoy]

Thank go odness.. was worried.

[JayceeC]

Em, even if you came in and hated a piece that I wrote and tore it apart, I would honor that as your opinion. I'm pretty rock steady and review here is a cakewalk compared to places that have torn my work apart line by line. Damn wish I had emoticons here so ((hugs)). :-) jan

[emmajoy]

Maybe we ought to create muggled words instead of emoticons.! Pass on the first one..

[MAC]

what a soothing write. it has brought calm to my hectic morning......thank you so much for sharing it :)

[JayceeC]

thank you for stopping by to read.

[alifeacoustic]

I had to read this twice to pay attention to the lines, as on first read I was interrupted by all the wonderful images the lines played in my head, like an old cine film, jumping from one act to the next. Sometimes we get lost in nature and others nature gets lost in us. Beautifully worded piece.

[JayceeC]

Oh I am pleased that you find this worthy of a second pass. I often do that. One tip get those first images and a second to savour. I'm glad I could pass along a little piece of nature.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nature inspires us in so many ways...a calming effect while at the same time igniting the passion of living and loving...

such beauty in the imagery here...i just saw everything you describe here so clearly with your succinct words.

[JayceeC]

Thanks Jacob,. This is a publication contest write for "A Midnight Walk" hopefully Tyne judge's like it as well. Thanks for always taking the time to stop by and read my scratch.