Whispers

Simply indescribable.

Raven-haired beauty--
How dost thine copious ringlets shine dull?

Cerulean-eyed tragedy--
How dost thine perception waver?

Epitome of elegance--
How dost thou be so senseless?

Prophetess of truth--
How dost thou remain in silence?

Cinematic disaster paints the skies--
Honeys of black and blue.
Twine of lead and iron--
Impale her being.
Sheathing her with impetuous death.

Whispers in the air--
Chanting:
“Spare her, spare her…”

A fiery maelstrom encircles--
Encompassing,
Eddying…

And at last they relent,
The embers ease away.
Preparing,
For another day.

In the clearing,
She is gone--
Not one shard spared.

Her snowy ashes--
Sinuous and free,
Lullaby in the wind.

A crowd gathers--
Mourning their martyred bride,
Tears in their eyes.

And I beg of thee,
Weep not for her heart.--
But for her life;
As she did love wholly,
And she did lose entirely.

Author's Note

Don't be afraid to tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

Wow. I don't know if I could find a word that really describes how amazing this poem is. You've done a BRILLIANT job with this poem. Your imagery is amazing; you've painted a gorgeous painting in your readers' minds. I love the style in which you wrote this poem, it draws the reader in, capturing their attention and making them yearn for the rest. I couldn't pull myself away from this piece! It is extremely well done and I adore it whole-heartedly. There is such beauty, such tragedy, such feeling in this writing, it completely swept me off my feet!

[KayOss]

Okay, I won't be afraid to tell you what I think of this... it was terrible!

No, I'm only kidding. Seriously, this was an amazingly superb poem. Goodness, there is nothing like reading a well-written piece. From the first line, I was drawn in. The more I read, the more I was pulled in. It was a beautiful story. I loved the story, the language, the flow, form, imagery, subject... heck, I even loved the font! What's there not to like about this poem? It's splendid.

To think, I read this because someone added it to their favorites and I was curious to see why. I'm glad they did and that my curiosity got the best of me. Now I'll be adding this to MY favorites. Who knows? Maybe someone else will be curious enough to read it. It'll certainly be worth their time. :)

Wonderful imagery!A favorite of mine,the first part excited me!

[Robert Luna]

I loved this the flow the story itself was both perfect. The images hat this painted so carelessly into my mind's eye with a grace of beauty. I liked the images being so vivid to the point I could almost smell the ash in the air. I think you did an excellent job with this and I will be adding this to my favorites.


Great JOb!!!!!!

[blue2u]

Wow, this is wonderfully penned, such emotion, I really liked it.

[gaurishankar]

As she did love wholly,
And she did lose entirely." beautiful concluding lines! Very thought provoking poem with nice flow like a stream!

[An owl on the moon]

Such a deeply moving, beautiful piece. Flows powerfully like an ancient epic, strong and bold. Well done!

[Karen James]

I love the movement in this piece. Written with such passion and paints some wonderful images.

[No One Important]

Gorgeous use of color and imagery. I was sucked in from the first line and washed away on a sea of bright lines vividly written...well done