life or death?

kinda personal stuff im going through....

 

Life or Death?

 

She sits in her little corner

crying her tears of pain

quietly so nobody can hear.

They all see the pain

but do nothing to help.

She holds a sharp object

at her wrists cutting herself deeply

and cry more.

She considers the thought of suicide

and thinks that death is better then this.

All she wants is for somebody to care,

to hold her tight when she cries.

People tell her that

they know how she feels

but they don’t know

and they never will.

She wants people to realize

that the pain isn’t a lie.

This is how she feels.

Everyday she puts on a fake smile

and pretends

because that’s all that left.

She is left alone

in her pretend world.

Please help me she cries out

but nobody seems to care

and nobody takes the time

to stop and help her

in her time of need.

Reviews

[Picture of Poetry]

This is such a wonderful poem. You have a gifted telent to write such a deep emoyion on paper. The sadness is covering this poem and it is just so wonderful. It allows the reader to feel everything and to get a picture. Wonderful poem. :>]

[Steffi]

Another good work.
THe only thing i can say is in the first few lines you use the word Pain to close to eachother and it kinda throws off the piece. maybe change it to something else.

[Brie]

Awww! So sad, but sends off a good message. TIME and LOVE.
I hope you feel better if you wrote this to vent.
Great job!
-Brie