Without You

Without You

A Poem by J.A.N

piss away the day

piss away the days,


                      why couldn't you stay?


piss away the week

piss away the weeks,


                       I'm getting weaker,


piss away the year,

piss away the years,


                      without you here


this bed is getting colder,

and by the hour I'm getting older

wondering how in Jesus precious

name I got here, underneath

these sheets, fucked up in deceit


salty tears, hide my face

I've got my father traits

and hesitation comes in waves

yet, they beg me to swallow

these fears, eating away

at this object of existents

they say is inside of me


and so dear, I hear

you've become someone anew

spit shine upon your shoes

ragged jeans, you no longer wear

third floor, fifth apartment

you rest, apart from me

well, I said I saw it coming

but I didn't see nothing

and come to think of it,

your tongue never  quite 

danced my name 


unlike you, I haven't changed

change from my pocket to pay

for the pill's I'm scheduled

to take half past twelve

just to calm all their nerves


piss away the day,

piss away the days,


                    why couldn't you stay?


piss away the week,

piss away the weeks,


                    I'm getting weaker,


piss away the year,

piss away the years,


                    without you here




the question still remains

yet, come morning

I will pack my things

write a letter, signed Jane

desolation will no longer

be of me, and I will write

of love, in all it's desires

and become - not just

better, but a beautiful

version of who I used to be

all thanks to you, for breaking me

my secret savior, in disguise

© 2011 J.A.N

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this is so sad !! good feeling throughtout the poem!:) i love the poem its good!:)

Posted 12 Years Ago

wow this is an amazing poem had me feeling like the emotions build one upon another rolling with waves and dissipating as they sink back into the ocean well done one of my faves of yours thus far


Posted 12 Years Ago

0 of 5 people found this review constructive.

Interesting style and very emotional. Enjoyed reading this. Nice write.

Posted 12 Years Ago

This poem is powerful and has very interesting style.
It moved me. (:
Keep writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago

This was such a great poem.
You have such an interesting writing style.
I love reading such talented writing selections from writers that don't seem to have a swollen cranium, haha.
Keep up the good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago

amazing, ilysfm jessiedoll

Posted 12 Years Ago

0 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Great peom I espcially love "this bed is getting colder, and by the hour I'm getting older" Well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago

As soon as I was done reading this I felt like it would make a really good song. I can see it in front of me...a dark stage, a girl with a guitar. The emotions feel honest. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has powerful emotion through out.
I liked reading this.
Well writ.

Posted 12 Years Ago

This was a good poem :) I'd just suggest you make it flow more nicely or you'll loose someones attention. However, over all? I think this was good :) Good Work :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on January 26, 2011
Last Updated on March 26, 2011



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