watered down nothingness

you decide.

it’s bliss

this emptiness

watered down nothingness

 

tastelessly arranged

red, white and blue

pills define the gain

 

hands that caress this skin

ought to care for it will despair

with each and -

        every inch compressing

     comprehending reflection

 

Mode De Vie and grease

swallowing a sudden sin    

               - assume 

                 lost appetite

 

destructive heart reconsider

these riddles of mind -  

                                     over matter 

　

ten days fade

and so does

the weight of -

 

                       the world

Author's Note

Does this poem seem unfinished?
I can't find words to complete it sincerely.
But as always, I thank you for reading.

Reviews

[Taylor.]

Very beautifully written. I enjoyed this very much. Your a wonderful writer.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

I loved it I wouldn't change a thing. it says lot with what is left unsaid it lets you use your own imagination and I loved the structure of this poem

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Not sure I ever heard the term "Mode De Vie" to know what it even means. But other than that I think it's finished. Leaves a bit to the reader's imagination. Nice write.

[trainwreck]

"hands that caress this skin
ought to care for it will despair
with each and -
every inch compressing
comprehending reflection."

Good write! I think it feels very finished. I was impressed with how well you did this. I really enjoy you'r style. I liked the flow and concept. Freely structured poems are awesome.

[Atosa]

I agree with the previous reviewer...I doesn't really feel unfinished...especially with the way you put down the words and the structure of it. I like it!

[Jay]

Also, upon rereading it, I found like it seams more like an ending of something. Like it needs a beginning. Hope this helps!

[Jay]

I think it is very finished, honesty. I like the way it flows. Your words are so simple yet intense when written like this. Bravo.