The So Called 'Friend'

watch out! there are people who pretend to hug you but instead stab you.

I was never into all you do

But once I stepped in I couldn’t go

 

Yours smiles, your words and fake etiquette

Cast a spell on me which I refused to hate

 

I made you my friend without realization

That there was no match for our mental synchronization

 

Gradually I felt there was something surely wrong

You had been using me for your purpose for so long

 

You never really cared about any of my deeds

Unless I was there to cater your needs

 

But I can’t bear this now I’m way too sore

Though you’ve made me a fool you won’t anymore

Author's Note

Sometimes there are people who just fake around and pretend to be your friend. But they forget that you exist when you need help.
Please vote and comment on my poem-it would mean a lot :)

Reviews

[An owl on the moon]

This is so filled with the pain caused by those who are too shallow to really love, to be a true friend that stays close no matter what. And though you write of the sorrow, you write of the strength as well, to move on with your life and not be pulled back anymore. Powerful.

[Jess]

Yesss...Thank you :)

[CiNtsaLis]

For a new writer; on writerscafe; you're amaxing

[Jess]

Thank youu

[Annie Nicole]

This is written very well! I could very much connect to it. I have had those kind of "friends" before, it sucks but it does give you some inspiration to write, which is the good thing. keep writing my friend!
-Annie

[Sarah King]

i could feel the pain of being betrayed by one, the rhythm and the passion was so touching. good work

[Jess]

:) :) Thanks for your time

[dexterous sam]

good work ...well done ....:)

[Jess]

...:)thanks

[Einstein Noodle]

yes there are!! no doubt people who connive, contrive and take ... pity ...those of us who behave in such ways ruin what is grand inside us all ... such a pity! nice tight couplets, honest rhymes not too trite ... me thinks this poem gives voicxe to a whole lot of people ..especially the youth :)
E.

[Jess]

Yesss! Thanks dude

[mjsalyers]

A lot of hurt in this one. It is a well written tale you paint into a portrait. It is always hard when you find out that your love never meant anything to the person you gave it to. The opening lines are my favorites. I hate that it happened to you because you seem very sweet as I was when I was young. Because of finding myself in your position so many times, I am now bitter and hard in the heart and hope it never happens to you. Anyways, this was a great write and I looking forward to reading more of your work.

[Jess]

Yes, its surprising yet painful. But anyways, thank you so much.

[Mary Helda]

Ohhh,i did notice an error,,you could change "Yourams words" to "Your words"....unless you really meant it to be that way:-)

[Mary Helda]

I really love the rhyming scheme and the choice of words used...simple yet very beautiful...i am glad you are able to realize such bad friends and let go..nicely done:-)

[Jess]

Thank you....:)

[Mary Helda]

You are welcome

[Malior]

A common tragedy. Recognizing the difference is key. Very nicely written, good use of words.

[Jess]

Thank you :)

[P_F_COGAN]

Hey Jess...Well you asked me to read your poem so I did. I can't flaw you on anything on the technical side because you have handled the technical components well. However, as a fellow poet I never read poetry with my head but with my heart instead. The poem moved and touched me on a smaller scale then maybe it could have. You sort of left my heart with a paper cut when I think you really wanted to leave a deep gash of pain and sorrow. If I were the poet I think I would have made it longer to lay out for the reader more of the emotional heartbreak associated with the treachery, lying, using, mistrust, pain, and hatred associated with being used by someone under the guise of true friendship.
Like once you have reached into my chest to make my heart feel your words rip the damn thing to shreds. Leave me in a puddle of tears wishing I could hunt the person down who hurt you and do the same to them.