Lost

I wrote this at work actually.. while helping customers haha, I´m glad people theese days like to pay with card. Hope you guys like it.

Picked the wrong road, I got misled

You went right, and I went left

I lost myself in love´s maze

Been here before, but I don´t know this place

 

Behind the trees the sun is low

Behind my pain I see your face

Walking behind me, grey shadow

All the love that went to waste

I don´t know where to go

Lost, but if it wasn´t for you

That wouldn´t be the case

 

It´s getting dark, I keep walking on my path

Can´t turn around, don´t know the way back

My shoes make clear footprints in the ground

But my broken heart I hide from everyone

 

I´m tired now, but I can´t stop

Stopping feels like giving up

And what if, what if you catch up

With your words, lies

Your burning eyes

Flowers ahead blooming bright

But were I walked past the beauty dies

 

I walk on; get to a lake

Reflecting all of my mistakes

How did I get into this mess?

Confusion and teardrops on the surface

I really thought I had won, it was right

Thought you were the one

I keep walking through the night

Finally I see the sun

Shining down

On a cold, lonely human being

With many shortcuts she´s not seeing

Heartbroken, down there on the ground

Lost, waiting to be found

 

Reviews

[zainul]

There is a beauty in being lost.
There is a yearning to be found from the state of being lost.
You put them quite beautifully.

[Rahul]

It's a big write but i can say or i must say it's an impactful write you made by your scented hands and heartfelt heart :) your creativity, imaginary all are nicely expressed in your own words. Keep it up. 100/100.

[Johanna]

Thankyou so much for all your lovely reviews!! :)) I´m so glad you are reading my poems! If you have time.. I´d love to see what you think about the poem "She". Is there any of your work in particular I should check out? :)

[Rahul]

My pleasure :)
well, i've too many but yet i've un published... lol cuz, i'm leaving this site... lol anyway, you can read my first one that i' didn't have unpublished yet :P

[Glen Yumang Manese]

The melancholy feel of this goes all the way down the page... and you wrote this at work and got paid for it... Ditto to that... as with your other write... there is a sense of longing in your words... may be that's just the way you wanted to write this... seems they were written in a relatively back to back order... one right after another...

[Johanna]

Thankyou :) People paid for their food, thankfully I managed to hide my poem in time. Not really allowed to write at work, but you know, when you get a poem in your head you get one^^ Yeah.. your right :) and thankyou again for your kind review and for reading my stuff!

[Inspiring Writer]

It's again an awesome write by you. Your thoughts're great here. I don't think it's a poem, i think it's a great movie preview... :P i liked your starting too... but i got one error... in this line, check it out
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"But were I walk past the beauty dies", here, you didn't write it grammatically correct, you've to write it as this.... "But Were I WALKED Past The Beauty Dies"... you can replace it with my this line if you want to correct it to. :)

Anyway, it was a minor fault only, don't take tension, you're stilll my best Writer :) soon, i'm gonna read your books/story's too as i'd said :) Until keep writing and keep posting :)

[Johanna]

Thankyou so much! :) haha, moviepreview huh? that would be cool :)

and thanks, I´ll correct it :) I´m glad you pointed it out, I stop seeing my mistakes after a while xD and english is not my first language so it helps me to get better :)

[Inspiring Writer]

Your welcome! :)
Yeh, you've shown me a movie promo indeed by your this outstanding write :)read moreYour welcome! :)
Yeh, you've shown me a movie promo indeed by your this outstanding write :)
well, anytime... what... !! really ?
Is English not your first lang... ? Tthat's awesome if it isnot.. lol cuz, it'd be great to talk to you if you're not English... lol and of course it'd be great to read youse work more then too... :P

so, may i ask, what's your tongue lan. if you don't mind ?

[KurKota]

I like this. You convey very well, the conflict of two people that fall into and out of love, and of course the hurt involved. You paint a fine word picture of these feelings. Very nice writing.

[Johanna]

Thankyou so much! :) Means a lot!

[Katerina]

Great poem! I really enjoyed reading it! I can definitely relate.

[Johanna]

Thankyou so much! That´s what I was hoping to achieve :)

[Luke L]

Beautiful and tragic. Great writing, lady!

[Johanna]

Really? you liked it? :D that´s great! was a little unsure of this one.. Glad you liked it, thankyou! :)

[Luke L]

You're welcome, feel free to check out my writing as well, if you like. But be forewarned, the "adult" ones are dirty :)

[Johanna]

won´t read the adul ones then ;) Do you have any of the others that you really recomend? :)

[Luke L]

I take pride in all my writing, but I just wrote a new one "Greatness" check out that if you like

[Johanna]

Will do :)