Voicemail

VOICEMAIL

There´s no one home

I know you're not

But even if you were

You wouldn't pick up

I am all alone

But I don't have a choice

I leave a message at the tone

It´s the only time I hear your voice

You say hi, It´s Taylor

right now I'm not home

But try again later

Or leave a message at the tone

and I'll try to get back to you

You didn't get back to me

and that´s the end of this tale

I kept trying with an apology

But only got your voicemail

I left one last message saying

I love you so much

Tried to add more coins

But I didn't have enough

Just wanted to hear your voice

But you didn't pick up

Reviews

[David]

this is very deep, and sad, but I love it

[Johanna]

thankyou :)

[David]

you're welcome :)

[Blue]

I feel the raw emotion behind the words, Johanna. I'm touched. You conveyed the pain very well!

[Johanna]

Thankyou :)

[Linda alexander]

Just wanted to hear your voice
But you didn't pick up

Well written, clear expression of feelings, can visualize, nice poem

[Johanna]

Thankyou Linda :) Yeah I like the visualizing style.. or so people tell me :)

[Linda alexander]

You most welcome

[Sami Khalil]

The anticipation for an answer, the diappointments of no answer. You have described that marvelously...:)............

[Johanna]

Thankyou Sami :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).....................

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Awwww so sweet romantic and adorable. All about missing someone terribly and you cant reach them, and how disappointed and depressed it gets you sometimes.
This was my favorite part:
I am all alone
But I don't have a choice
I leave a message at the tone
It´s the only time I hear your voice.

Brilliant poem loved it :)

[Johanna]

Yeah it is really sad sometimes! :/

I´m glad you did, happy valentinesday Cimmy :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

so it would be :(
Awwww thank chu :) you to :)

[00000000000000000000000..]

Awww this is sweet I like this, Idk how many ever done that but I have:) I have seen it played many ways to just a happy moment to that very special person passed away in your life. I loved it:)

[Johanna]

I´m glad :) Thankyou

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Very welcome my friend:)

[ScottWinchester]

The great pleasure of this poem lies in both the remarkable illustration and the emotions invoked from it; a deathly combination of lyrical skill and sorrowful story.

You write good poetry, Johanna Magdalena.

[Johanna]

Thankyou Scott ^^)

[Avinash]

Its heart wrenching . The details which are otherwise non-descriptive in this tale of fading love have come back to life.

[Johanna]

Thankyou avinash :)

[Elina]

This is a great poem. The feeling of loss, hope and longing were depicted so well.

[Johanna]

Thankyou Elina :)

[Elina]

You're quite welcome!