Someday

originally called, "Can You?", its precursor was published on this website a couple of months ago

Can you hold your head up high,

While others force it down?

Can you look up to the sky,

But live upon the ground?

Can you know a million names,

And speak them one-by-one?

Can you have a million days,

But live like you have none?

Can you sleep in perfect peace,

in your house haunted with regret?

and Can you truly be that man,

Behind your silhouette?

Can you walk among the graves,

And smile at the lives;

That etched themselves into the stone,

And said their last goodbyes?

If the sun is setting,

Can you still embrace the day?

If you walk the road less travelled by,

Can you find your way?

If you look into a mirror,

and If you look into your eyes;

Can you see the boy?

Who lives, and loves, and laughs, and cries?

If you say you do,

And If you say you can;

then Can I please sir ask of you,

To take me by the hand?

And guide me down,

That less travelled way;

So I may say, "I Can!"

Someday!

Author's Note

please inform me of any errors and stuff you find

and feel free to dig deeper into the poem and ask me why i used certain words and certain verb tenses and stuff like that

Reviews

[cest la vie]

I get to differ on my collaboration partners review(the man below me)..
I really like this piece..
I actually can envision this as an almost spoken word...The message you render is one which lays close to my heart. Can I? Help, guide me, etc.. Again, I reiterate, love this piece.

[Starting Over]

I feel the same way! Beautiful write.. I loved the graveyard party it was really pretty!

[Cool Handless Luke]

i loved it. the last verse got a bit muddled with the rhyme scheme set by the previous verses. i like the words but i lost the flow. i know we never read it like the author intends but for me i just kinda lost it. still an excellent poem!