When the Night Drowns in Dawn

 

When the Night

Turns to day,

We feel our powers

Slip away.

 

We, the dark ones

Spend our nights

Wrapped around our victims

Shrilling with delight.

 

Nothing can stop us

And no one dares try,

Because once you face us,

You’d wish you could die.

 

Our eyes penetrate

Deep into your mind,

But fear is the only emotion

We’re likely to find.

 

But as the sun’s rays

Begin to slice through the night,

We recoil into the darkness -

We hate the light.

 

Flee into the darkness

That’s what we do,

To tear our hearts out –

Damn, the day starts anew.

 

But here we’ll lie

Until dusk settles in,

Then we’ll start where we left off -

The darkness deep within…

 

Copyright©JosieWentzel08July2009

Reviews

[deeps]

I like this it has wonderful imagery in it.
Well written as well, awesome flow.

[Sean M. Addams]

love the dark tones in this piece... the imagery is done well too... overall nice job on this.... fav lines...Our eyes penetrateDeep into your mind,But fear is the only emotionWe're likely to find.

[Amber Nicole]

Nice with a subtle hint of creepy. I liked it and it had a nice flow to it. The only problem I really had didn't come from your writing but the big red lettering. It took away from the poem itself. Sometimes simpler is better.