Wild Child

Wild Child

Wild Child

Not even Seventeen

Wild Child

Can you make Sixteen?

Party and drink

Keep it up and you won’t live to make Fifteen

Stop and think

You’re supposed to play at Fourteen

Used to go to school

Left before you turned Thirteen

What happened with little Bobby at the pool?

When you were a Preteen?

 

Wild Child

Bobby did something bad

Wild Child

Mother dead…where was your dad?

They kicked you out of school

A week before you turned Thirteen

Because they saw the baby drool

Thought about death, stopped with pills in your hand

Three days after you turned Fourteen

That year it was hard for you to stand

After all you just turned Fourteen

 

Baby cries…

You party all night long

This is your life at Fifteen

Smoke fills the air, cocaine in your nose

By now your baby just hit three and you passed out on the floor..

A dying teen

Sick…Bleeding

You’re barely alive at Sixteen

Four year old watches…mommy hardly eating

Skin and bones, the drug eating you from the inside out 

Three months after you turned sixteen

Life left your broken body

A day before you turned Seventeen

Guess who has your baby…her father Bobby

 

Wild Child

Didn’t make it to Seventeen

Wild Child

Died at Sixteen

Reviews

[Perfect Mistake]

Wow this is simply amazing! This made me think and every word to every line is very vivid. Loved the story that was told in each stanza. This gives an out look on teenagers these day, doing whatever they please with no consequences. Great job on this :3

[TKBickel]

I’ll jump on the wow train. Talk about tough and hard hitting. I love how it flows with a count down at the beginning.

Check these couple of spots and see if that’s what you wanted.
‘You’re supposed to plat at Fourteen’
‘Guess who has your baby…her father Bobb’

[marytownsend]

Sad but written with a lot of truth and depth. It holds you in its grasp till the very end. Great writing!

[Whiskurz]

A very sad write, but woven with the skill of a master poet......Whisk

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very sad but in this day and age a reality many people try to look past.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Such a sad, sad reality in our society at times. This breaks my heart. Wonderfully written Layla.

[Lydia]

A wonderful read and write.

[Judas Hammer]

would make an awesome song, maybe write it into a lyric. Very nice

[MOON]

Poignant write ,written so creatively going backwards in time . Thought- provoking emotional .

[None]

Wow. This is tragicly told. I have chills. The lines about Bobby, what he did, ad that he ends up with the kid are so unfair. The girl of the story is heart wrenching. Sad thing is, this happens all the time. A revealing write. i love how you peal back the pages of time to where she is, work you way back to where things went wrong, and then work your way to the fatal end. No one wins here, but some escape what's due them, while others pay the price.

Powerful, moving, and revealing. this is what writing is supposed to do.

[Suditi]

WOW.
This was something.
A fresh concept.
Written with such creativity.
A very interesting poem.
Great job. :D