Around the Fence

A duet (or as I like to call it, a collaboration with myself.. :)

I can't believe that finally you're mine

I can't believe I used to be so blind

I wanted you, I think that you're devine

I can't believe just now it's been untwined

 

Such a sweet romance,

just around the fence.

Now all I'm longing for

is your embrace.

 

I used to try and act as if I'm cool

You used to walk me every day from school

But every time I acted like a fool

I used to be a b***h and act so cruel

 

Such a sweet romance,

just around the fence.

You're all I care about

in this familier place.

 

And then one day by chance our eyes have met

You kissed me and it felt so weird, but great!

But one thing haven't made clear as of yet

Shut up you fool - I love you, just accept!

 

 

 

 

I can't believe that finally you're mine

I can't believe I used to be so blind

And now that you are here I must declain

To let you go after this final line

Author's Note

Dark Blue - male
Lilac - female
Light Blue - both

Reviews

[Steffi]

I liked you intwining the two people and sepertating them by color.
The only thing i can say negatively is that in some spots it seems choppy and the flow is off.
But i think it was a really cute write :D

[Tania Leigh]

Very playful poem :-)

A self-collaboration is certainly something unique, but you pulled it off, as this did read as two people conversing. Nice write!

[Amor-de-angel]

Very original.... a collaboration with yourself...?lol
liked it though

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

haha I didnt think a collaboration with oneself was possible you have proven me wrong! Nicely done. Truly delightful.


Great Write
Rayne