where are you?

Where are you?

Where did you go?

You said you were going to hold me every night

You said u would hold me when I was sad

Why aren’t you here?

Why can’t you see that I need you here now?

I’m so cold without u here

Why must you be away from me?

You said u would hold me while it was raining

As I wait for you to come back to me I think of all the time we’ve shared

Every moment was bliss, every moment helps me go on

Every moment makes the thought of seeing you even more better.

Author's Note

ignore grammar..and don't waste words telling me it sucks.

Reviews

[Pax Analog]

It doesn't get any more poignant than "where are you"?

The inherent hauntingness of the human condition carries a neon exclamation point when the lover is missing.

Even so, in this poem, you capture the essence of bliss-memory like a precious butterfly held with care.

Angel of love circle all longing hearts. . .

[W. Michael Anthony]

I liked the mention of the night and the rain. This imagery was very real to me and helped bring the message of the poem to heart.

[the nothing]

exelent write juila i belive that when a person is left alone by there partner weather it be male or female that the suniffciant other is at falt for allowing such a thing to happen I unddestand you belived you loved him but after this was brought to his attention the first time this should've been cause for a break up

[Eagle Cruagh]

It don`t suck !

I see this as a tongue in cheek,

having fun with the never ending love

and love lost we see in Cafe' .

Considering this poem may be a serious

cry for love which , if genuine is very
convincing.

Beautiful poem.

Nice construction.

My rating ----- 100 %

------ Eagle Cruagh

[The Flawed]

I like it,
It tells me how you feel and it also makes me wonder, is he gone? Or is he away for a while and subsequently she is feeling lonely and missing him?
But what do I know?
Well done.

[Martin See]

i enjoyed reading your poem of longing...we sometimes do pine for something, someone...it's great that the suggestion of a broken promise 'Why aren't you here? Can't you see i need you here now? is in your poem'...the artist questions more than she answers, cos sometimes we don't want to know the answers...cool stuff...

[Obsidian Blackbird McNi..]

anytime a poem has more questions than actual sentences, I know my mind cogs are gonna get to work.
I like the way you framed them in this piece and also I enjoyed the sadness (understated superbly, by the by). I'm so cold without you here....absolutely. Though, perhaps the narrator should bring along a cardigan to button up when she walks away!

thank you for sharing this